In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement

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In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

It is said "Experience comes with years and years of routine practice". Most achievements are the result of years of experience that bolsters the person's performance. By gaining a rewards it also helps to motivate a man to move forward. I agree with author's point of view that in order to make a significant contribution, experience in the same field yields great achievements.

First reason for my belief is, experience leads to refinement of existing skillset. For instance, I joined as an associate software developer in TCS.inc five years back. I was a rookie back then and I couldn't able to code faster and effectively. I acknowledge this fact about myself and move forward to gain the internal training about the process integration with Java, C++ after working hours, I had to pay extra but it was worth gaining the skill. I was determined and learned diligently about the structure of codes and formation of networking. It took me almost six months to learn and another six months to refine my skills. After a year, I got promoted to senior software engineer with a 50 percent increment in my paycheck. After five years I'm now a technical lead of my departmental process. This success is achieved by my refinement of skills, and accomplishments that I receive during the tenure of my work. With every achievement I got motivated, progress linearly and will be doing the same in the years to come. Therefore, the contributions that I made in TCS.inc are the result of my experience that refined my skillset to the best.

Second reason for my agreement is that without certain motivation It is unlikely to gain a significant result. For example, my brother won International Mathematic Olympiad twice, in his high school and senior high school years. Past that he failed miserably in his math classes in his middle school. After acknowledging his failure, he joined a coaching classes after school and worked hard to understand the concepts. He successfully passed his middle school last-year examination with a good grade that motivated him to study more about the subject. This motivation pushed him to make a habit of enjoying the subject and thus, he won IMO Gold metal and silver metal respectively. Therefore, success is a function of motivation and experience.

However, some might agree that in order for any achievement, gaining knowledge and then practicing with determination can lead to successful result but, it cannot produce the same result that an experience person can deliver and to be successful motivation is not the only factor that is necessary.

In conclusion, due to the facts and examples stated above, I concur that in order to be successful in any field, years of experience followed by extrinsic motivation is the way to success.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...f years of experience that bolsters the persons performance. By gaining a rewards it al...
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Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a reward' or simply 'rewards'?
Suggestion: a reward; rewards
...ers the persons performance. By gaining a rewards it also helps to motivate a man to move...
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Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...rs back. I was a rookie back then and I couldnt able to code faster and effectively. I ...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tra but it was worth gaining the skill. I was determined and learned diligently a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...rement in my paycheck. After five years Im now a technical lead of my departmental...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02591792657 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01825324273 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516198704104 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5977362768 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9583333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2916666667 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0950508659291 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277843290237 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358981194787 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0641290494989 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025249935488 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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