In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
Although some people believe that beginners bring variety of new ideas I believe that experience of the experts of that field has more significant contributions.
First, I would like to consider Police department in which inqiry plays a major role. One cannot deny that experienced officers have come across many investigations during their tenure. Knowledge they have gained over the years will surely help them in investigating new crimes or cases. On the other hand, amateur of this field are more prone to make mistakes during their initial years. They learn from their mistakes and that is how they become strong and powerful in their fields.
Second, another major firm that involves asking questions is law. Even in this field, a lawyer's knowledge gets compounded over the years. The more cases he handle, the more knowledge he is going to aquire. The mistakes he made in one case may serve as a lesson to his next case. While it is true that a tyro of this field is prone to have broader mindset since it is his starting year of career and he might also bring lot of new ideas to firm, but we cannot be sure about how fruitful these new ideas are going to be. Many of the new approach taken by beginners may not be viable and they might waste their time in making those ideas work while experienced people are doing something fruitful in that time.
In summary, I would like to say that a neophyte may bring numerous eccentric ideas, approaches to their filed of inquiry. However, a connoisseur will have better knowledge of viability of those ideas. Beginner is tend to make more mistakes than experienced and he will learn from his mistakes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although some people believe that beginners brin...
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Line 6, column 89, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lawyers'' or 'lawyer's'?
Suggestion: lawyers'; lawyer's
...questions is law. Even in this field, a lawyers knowledge gets compounded over the year...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'handles'.
Suggestion: handles
...unded over the years. The more cases he handle, the more knowledge he is going to aqui...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...f viability of those ideas. Beginner is tend to make more mistakes than experienced ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, as to, in summary, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 2235.4752809 61% => OK
No of words: 289.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75432525952 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43674296202 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550173010381 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1448739627 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0974093128667 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356417265036 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378924612636 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723350491133 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256346836343 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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