As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
First, today computers are ruling the world. Application of computers is rampant and to understand how computers work, one should learn computer programming. To illustrate, let me take an example of a student who has just enrolled into computer science. Initial years of his study include understanding the basics of programming language. This will not give him the bigger picture of how computers work. But, as he studies Data Structures, Operating Systems, Algorithms and many other important subjects, he will gets the idea of how computers and real world applications work. Initially, all these technology and application may appear mysterious but once he understands the concepts, he will know exactly how technology works.
In addition to this, study of medicine is another good example to support this fact. Eventhough there are many facts that are still mysterious and humans beings have not made much progress in finding medicine to disease like AIDS etc. But having more knowledge and experience makes things easy to comprehend. For example, a medical student just like computer student will not have much knowledge during his initial years. As he aquires more knowledge things start to make sense. Erudite knowledge is required for any doctors to diagnise a patient and to treat them. Having more knowledge helps them to seggregate patients into different categories.
However, there are fields of study where things become more complicated and mysterious with the gain of knowledge. Study of Universe is one best example. This could probably because, size of the universe is enormous. Although, humans have made good progress in space study during recent years, most of the universe is still beyond our reach and it is impossible to understand it completely. Apart from this most of the fields of study becomes lucid once we start to aquire knowledge in that field.
In summary, not all the fields of study become obstruse as we gain knowledge. Instead, it answers many questions and it will help us to understand more complex issues in that field
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 514, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
... many other important subjects, he will gets the idea of how computers and real worl...
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Line 1, column 594, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this technology' or 'these technologies'?
Suggestion: this technology; these technologies
...world applications work. Initially, all these technology and application may appear mysterious b...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: HUMANS_BEINGS[2]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean: 'human beings'?
Suggestion: human beings
...any facts that are still mysterious and humans beings have not made much progress in finding ...
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Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uch knowledge during his initial years. As he aquires more knowledge things start ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, still, apart from, for example, in addition, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 334.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19461077844 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68650977878 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547904191617 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7074909704 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.619047619 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9047619048 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100297787355 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375111399208 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530345245259 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759523625067 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439134102172 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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