As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In today’s fast-paced world, knowledge is a prerequisite, even for a layperson, to participate in the most trivial activities. Right from our childhood to our adolescent years merging into adulthood, we learn the nuances of day-to-day living and acquire knowledge, even about the most simplest of things. Over time, our acts become banal and our mastery of basic actions allows us to perform tasks without focusing too much on the action at hand. However, as times are progressing, there is a surging trend, even a necessity to have specialized knowledge in a topic we choose as our “domain” or “career path.” Throughout history, people have chosen to specialize and focus on a particular subject, be it Chemistry, the study of the human body or the study of planets. Considering the given prompt, it is logical to say that knowledge is essential to understand any topic, and the more one acquires of it, the more someone will understand the nitty-gritty of the subject. This directly means that acquiring knowledge may help one to not only become sufficiently abled in the field, rather, it is deviating to say that an abundance of knowledge will cause the subject to become complex or mysterious for two reasons.
Even though the term “knowledge” itself is subjective, and mastery of a subject may differ at its most fundamental levels, one can say that any amount of acquired knowledge, even the most basic forms, can instantly be put to use. For instance, consider the study of languages and the benefits of learning multiple languages. Research has shown that people who are bilingual perform better in society, and tend to lead more satisfied lives. When one starts studying a language, constant exposure to that particular language leads to overall mastery of it. If a student who has never taken German courses in the duration of her lifetime decides to do so, and begins to learn the study from its most basic forms to advanced usage of the language, it is evident that the student will acquire at least formal mastery of the language, if not a complete proficiency. Rather, the more detailed knowledge the student acquires of the German language, through various means and forms - the more she will develop her writing, reading or speaking abilities in German. It would, therefore, be incorrect to say that specialized knowledge in a language would cause the student to believe that things are becoming more complex and mysterious. Studies have also shown that people who spend more than the median number of hours acquiring specialized knowledge in a field enables them to perform better in the field than their counterparts, thereby, directly correlating to the above example of a student studying German who decides to dive deep into the subject and acquire knowledge of German at an advanced level.
To continue further, consider the example of the team of computer programmers and software developers who wrote multiple algorithms and code so as to allow mankind’s first mission to the Moon to take place. Having relevant software development experience requires specialized knowledge that involves a deep study of the topic at hand. Knowledge can only be acquired by the constant study of the domain one works in, not only by deriving surface-level details, but by choosing to master advanced concepts, theories and details, sometimes, even concepts that are incomprehensible and pursued by only a few. The team of engineers involved in the mission to the moon were not only expected to have detailed knowledge, but were required to do so because of the tasks they had to handle. Having said that, it is conspicuous that the more specialized knowledge one decides to obtain, the more challenges will be thrown at that person. This may occur for several reasons, the most common being the difficulty of advanced-level topics, the lack of research on these topics or the mental barriers people with different levels of aptitude may face when dealing with a topic. It is possible that sometimes, advanced-level topics may seem obscure, or even difficult to understand, at best, it is possible that the more one relentlessly pursues specialized knowledge related to these topics, the more pathways open up and the “topic” tends to become clearer. This is evident from multiple cases in the prosperity of the human race, especially in the field of science and medicine. Researchers and medical practitioners who found the cure to some deadly diseases, such as smallpox, or even common ones like fever required a knowledge so fundamentally “deep” which could only come after a lot of detailed analysis, study and iteration of materials which took place over a period of time. Thus, even though each domain has its own set of difficulties, or obscurities, the more one tends to deal with the subject matter by effectively studying, practicing and learning about it, things tend to become clearer and solutions tend to emerge.
In conclusion, it can be said that detailed knowledge of a subject may lead one to face some complexities, the more one pursues specialized knowledge - the more clearer things become over time. Hence, as we acquire more knowledge, things not only become more comprehensible, but may lead us to develop solutions that may put forth a completely new line of thought, which will only happen with detailed study
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 286, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'simplest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: simplest
...g and acquire knowledge, even about the most simplest of things. Over time, our acts become b...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 142, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... who wrote multiple algorithms and code so as to allow mankind's first mission to t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 270, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "requires specialized" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'specializing' or 'to be specialized'.
Suggestion: specializing; to be specialized
...oftware development experience requires specialized knowledge that involves a deep study of...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1882, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...on of materials which took place over a period of time. Thus, even though each domain has its ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 157, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...one pursues specialized knowledge - the more clearer things become over time. Hence, as we a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, at least, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 30.0 11.3162921348 265% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 131.0 58.6224719101 223% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4534.0 2235.4752809 203% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 883.0 442.535393258 200% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13476783692 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.45117564533 4.55969084622 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98388192498 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 381.0 215.323595506 177% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431483578709 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1434.6 704.065955056 204% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.9394542812 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.384615385 118.986275619 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.9615384615 23.4991977007 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171603045791 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583117007145 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055864845822 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139525896053 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554074895333 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 206.0 100.480337079 205% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.