People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelli

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Human behaviour has been studied, talked about and debated on from ages - by scientists, researchers, medical practitioners and even those engaged in philosophical and psychological concerns. The prompt tells us that people’s behaviour is determined by forces not of their own making, and I would most likely agree with the prompt but with certain restrictions based on two reasons. I believe that many times people’s behaviour may be dependent on factors out of their control, for example, their childhood or other traumatic incidents that they dealt with throughout the course of their lifetime. Having said that, I also believe that using trauma as a reason to justify unacceptable behaviour, or using “out-of-control” situations as a base for these behavioural traits is not only improper, but also downright unethical.

Consider the case of a child who is born into a family with meagre means and resources, where the father of the family is abusive towards his wife and his children, and an addict to drugs and alcohol. Here, this child may have a traumatizing childhood, and may have to deal with experiences and situations that he isn’t ready to understand yet. Over time, he may face a number of behavioural, mental and emotional problems, such as depression, anxiety and may even develop social relationships in which he is the abuser. Research has shown us, time and again, that multiple people who have been victimized and abused, socially and physically, tend to develop patterns in which they victimize others. This is primarily because their behaviour is largely dictated by their childhood experiences, and breaking out of such a vicious cycle may require therapy, medication and a lot of mental and emotional rejuvenation. Thus, this shows us that the child in this scenario had his behaviour dictated by forces not of his making, and exhibited personality traits that he didn’t choose to develop in the first place.

However, even though I agree that people’s instinctive behaviour may have been developed through years of social conditioning, or that their innate abilities may be a by-product of their experiences throughout their lifetimes, I also believe that people can choose to fight their “instinctive” behaviour by allowing themselves to learn what is correct, morally ethically and justifiable. For example, consider a female growing up in a conservative Indian family. She will be subject to years of social conditioning by family, relatives and friends in matters that vary from LGBT relationships to even colouring her hair red. This is because of a primary stigma in Indian families that has been taking place from generations - the girl is always expected to be on her best behaviour and even simple acts of working after marriage, having friends from the opposite gender and drinking alcohol is considered derogative. Over time, she develops a tendency to judge other females who indulge in these normal acts, and considers them to be vulgar. However, with access to education and social media, there is simply no justifiable reason why she should continue to indulge in these toxic behavioural patterns. She can simply choose to educate herself on the subject at hand, for example, she can learn that LGBT relationships are normal, just as heterosexual relationships, and she can change her instinctive behaviour of deciding to judge people involved in these relationships. Over time, she may even be supportive of situations she once was appalled at. This requires overcoming years of social conditioning, but there is no reason why an adult should choose to indulge in behavioural patterns that are offensive and hurtful to others and themselves, only on the basis that this is what they learnt or that this is how they suffered emotionally throughout their childhood. Thus, even though one’s initial behaviour may be based on factors out of their control, people can always choose to learn, re-learn and adapt to situations based on their new learning’s.

We can also connect this to the example of the child who was mentally and physically abused and had a traumatic childhood experience. I agree that the child may find it difficult to cope and may exhibit an amount of unacceptable behaviour, however, once he reaches adulthood and engages in social and romantic relationships, using his childhood experience to behave improperly is incorrect. As adults, we are responsible for our own baggage, and it is in his benefit to consider working on his emotions - through therapy or other forms. Therefore, he cannot use his experiences as excuses, and doing so might lead him to have no social connections or bonds as people may not want to be associated with such a person.

In conclusion, I would like to say that even though there are reasons or situations in which a person’s behavioural traits may be dependent on forces or factors out of their control; this cannot be used as a factor to justify constant toxic, hurtful or harmful behaviour. Our attitudes and behaviour is constantly changing, and we must learn to adapt so that we can evolve into being decent human beings with functional and justifiable behaviour.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.5258426966 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 30.0 12.4196629213 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 52.0 14.8657303371 350% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.3162921348 256% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 102.0 33.0505617978 309% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 113.0 58.6224719101 193% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4386.0 2235.4752809 196% => OK
No of words: 841.0 442.535393258 190% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21521997622 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.38516480713 4.55969084622 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11432719586 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 369.0 215.323595506 171% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438763376932 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1360.8 704.065955056 193% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 6.24550561798 368% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 14.0 1.77640449438 788% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.9421069914 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.692307692 118.986275619 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3461538462 23.4991977007 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136523570337 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452167008425 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440635368911 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891144228807 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239406136501 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.8420337079 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 209.0 100.480337079 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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