The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Author of this proposal to build new attractive dormitories to serve the housing needs of students definetly needs to consider many factors before coming into such conclusion. While argument sounds logical looking at the current trend, there may be hidden factors that affect the number of student enrollment to Buckingham College.
Firstly, author assumes that student enrollment is going to be same for next fifty years based on current trend. Data set for fifty years is too much to come to any conclusion based on current trends. Also, there are high chances for change in student pattern for the next fifty years. Author also undermines the possibility of burgening of new schools that affect the admission of students to Buckingham.
Secondly, Author's assumption that based on current trends, population will double over the next fifty years is vague. There is no statistcal data to prove that number of students enrollment has increased. Also, There are many factors that would contribute to student population. Number of babies born in the city might decrese abrubptly which will definetly decrease the student population in coming years. Hence, one cannot predict the future population based on current trends.
Thirdly, author author says that average rent of the apartment has risen in recent years. In order to evaluate this argument we need to know the rent of individual apartments. It could be possible that there are more number of lavish apartments in the city compared to number of economical partments that lead to increase in the price of overall rent. However, we cannot overlook the fact that economy apartments do exist despite the fact that average rent of apartments has increased. Also, there is no gurantee that apartment prices will going to increase for the next coming years.
Based on the implication that current trends would continue to sustain for next fifty years is fallacious and author of this argument undermines various factors that should have been considered while coming to such a conclusion. Hence, to say that Buckingham should construct new dormitories to accommodate new students based on current trends is parochial and many factors need to be considered to further evaluate this argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Author of this proposal to build new attractive dormitories to serve the housing needs of students definetly needs to consider many factors before coming into such conclusion.
Error: definetly Suggestion: definitely
Sentence: Author also undermines the possibility of burgening of new schools that affect the admission of students to Buckingham.
Error: burgening Suggestion: burdening
Sentence: There is no statistcal data to prove that number of students enrollment has increased.
Error: statistcal Suggestion: statistical
Sentence: Number of babies born in the city might decrese abrubptly which will definetly decrease the student population in coming years.
Error: abrubptly Suggestion: abruptly
Error: decrese Suggestion: decrease
Error: definetly Suggestion: definitely
Sentence: It could be possible that there are more number of lavish apartments in the city compared to number of economical partments that lead to increase in the price of overall rent.
Error: partments Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Also, there is no gurantee that apartment prices will going to increase for the next coming years.
Error: gurantee Suggestion: guarantee
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argument 1 -- not exactly. maybe students are mainly from locals in the future. and they live with their parents instead of living in dormitories...
argument 2 -- one argument is enough.
argument 3 -- not exactly. better to say: Price is only one reason for students to choose where to live.
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1846 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.128 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.528 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: author
...on based on current trends. Thirdly, author author says that average rent of the apartment...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 541, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
... no gurantee that apartment prices will going to increase for the next coming years. ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26111111111 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5856381594 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9331464992 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.222222222 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19982039756 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686285790479 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628045626494 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131331026016 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780302994077 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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