Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
While it may be true that people of Plainsville lead healthy lives, this author's argument doesn'y make cogent case for success of opening new franchise by Nature's Way in town of Plainsvile. It is easy to understand that people who want to lead healthy life might engage in physical activities, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to prove the possibility of success of Nature's Way franchise in Plainsville.
First, There is no statistical data to prove that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are all-time high. Also, we do not have overall population details current year and previous years to say that Plainsville's local health club has more members that ever. Moreover, there is no guarantee that members of health club or people who excercise would buy health food and health related products. May be they eat junk all the time and they just want to compensate by doing little excercise or they want to be motivated towards leading healthy life, so they might have joined health club. We cannot simply assume that people who excercise or members of health club would buy health food or health related products.
Secondly, author of this argument overlooks the possibility of existing shops in plainsville that sell health food and health related products. If the city is already abundant with such shops, then competion will be more and it is very unlikely that Nature's Way franchise is going to be successful if there are couple of such famous shops in Plainsville. We cannot neglect this factor in evaluating success of opening new franchise.
Thirdly, it is easy to understand that Today's kids are Tomorrow's future, but we do not know what habbits they are goiung to adopt once they grow up. Most of the schools now a days create awareness in kids about benifits of healthy food habbits and healthy life styles by various programs. But there is no guarantee that kids will adopt those things in their real life. So this argument is not credible enough to predict the future life style of Today's kids.
Despite the argument that Nature's Way should open a new franchise in Plainsville, since, it's people engage in health clubs and in exercising activities may sound logical at the beginning, after considering above factors we need more data to prove the credibility of author's argument. Hence, it's not persuasive enough to say that Nature's Way is going to be successful by opening it's new franchise.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Moreover, there is no guarantee that members of health club or people who excercise would buy health food and health related products.
Error: excercise Suggestion: exercise
Sentence: May be they eat junk all the time and they just want to compensate by doing little excercise or they want to be motivated towards leading healthy life, so they might have joined health club.
Error: excercise Suggestion: exercise
Sentence: We cannot simply assume that people who excercise or members of health club would buy health food or health related products.
Error: excercise Suggestion: exercise
Sentence: If the city is already abundant with such shops, then competion will be more and it is very unlikely that Nature's Way franchise is going to be successful if there are couple of such famous shops in Plainsville.
Error: competion Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Thirdly, it is easy to understand that Today's kids are Tomorrow's future, but we do not know what habbits they are goiung to adopt once they grow up.
Error: goiung Suggestion: going
Error: habbits Suggestion: habits
Sentence: Most of the schools now a days create awareness in kids about benifits of healthy food habbits and healthy life styles by various programs.
Error: benifits Suggestion: benefits
Error: habbits Suggestion: habits
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argument 1 -- not OK. need to argue:
Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs.
we may argue like: maybe it is located in a hilly area.
argument 2 -- somehow out of topic. we need to argue:
The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full.
we may argue like: maybe the club is on promotion.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2022 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.797 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.177 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Way) must be used with a third-person verb: 'franchises'.
Suggestion: franchises
...e possibility of success of Natures Way franchise in Plainsville. First, There is no s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...ealth food and health related products. May be they eat junk all the time and they jus...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ibility of existing shops in plainsville that sell health food and health related...
^^
Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
... once they grow up. Most of the schools now a days create awareness in kids about benifits...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 174, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...e they grow up. Most of the schools now a days create awareness in kids about benifits...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93045563549 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54086216456 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474820143885 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5425859952 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.5 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294287129766 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987668843102 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793670935727 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174621901704 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880438497354 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.