Any person who knowingly commits a crime to break his social contract should be denied his civil rights and not allow to obtain the fruits of his labor.
Civil rights are the fundamental, basic right of every individual. A person can not be simply denied, his fundamental rights, in any circumstances. It is true that some restrictions/ limitations can be imposed upon such rights, in some special circumstances, but still every individual has the fundamental right to benefit from the sweats of his labor. I mostly disagree with the claim provided above. In my view, it would be a despotic form of governance, to deny the civil rights to any individual.
First of all, we must consider the fact that, just in case a person committed a crime knowingly , does not necessarily brand him as a vicious criminal. There have been many circumstances in which a benevolent individual knowingly broke the social contract only to end the injustice prevailing in the society. Let us consider the political history of Nepal for an example. Before the advent of democracy in 2007, the civilians were forced to sustain under the authoritative regime of the Rana government. Even the basic fundamental right of education was considered a prerogative of the ruling class. Many political leaders raised their voice to end this cruel governance and they rallied the people, demanding for establishment of democracy. During this entire endeavor, they were well aware that, they were breaking the "social contract" established by the Rana regime. If this perspective had stymied their actions, then the establishment of democracy and rule of the people, would have still been a chimerical dream of Nepalese people. Eventually, many of this leaders were captured and imprisoned by the Rana government, but this does not imply that such benevolent leaders should have been devoid of their civil rights.
Secondly, let us take a well known example. It is well evident that many prisoners are provided the right to be engaged in some type of works, within the prison boundaries and earn some money or learn some skills. If it was to be established that denying this right of benefiting from their labor, would have been beneficial in any ways, then the above mentioned provisions would not have been provided to the prisoners. In fact, in my views, this amenity, additionally helps in redeeming of the prisoners and establishes a human sentiment in them. Furthermore, we can simply look at the provision of granting pardon to minor peccadilloes in the form of "community services". Such provisions were established on the fact that, when a convict works to pay off his crime, it will hasten the process of redemption.
However, it is often argued that,in some cases the viciousness of crime committed by the person is so repugnant, that it is better off to punish him by denying any form of civil rights. Although, this is not a completely implausible statement and many countries try to follow this, by establishing provisions of death punishment to the guilty, but still we must consider the fact that there may be some other way of making the sinner pay for his crime. This should not be considered as the ultimate decision, and the fact that there is still some other way and we should be able to provide a second chance to the criminal to atone for his crime, should not be discarded. So, to conclude, in my view, complete detainment of civil rights or the right to benefit from his/her labor, should only be allowed, in extreme cases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, as to, in fact, first of all, in my view, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2832.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 565.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01238938053 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92592521176 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470796460177 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 889.2 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3303055145 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5416666667 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54166666667 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283964682731 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780771044239 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769826937378 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18922666792 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958299548245 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 100.480337079 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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