In any situation, progress requires discussion among people who have contrasting points of view.
Per age old saying discussion between people with opposing view triggers a change, a change for good. In my opinion, discussion with different people with different perspective help gain valuable information which is primary for growth in any aspect of life and I highly agree with the statement presented in the prompt for 2 main reasons.
Firstly, people differ from one another in area of skills and expertise. I.e. some have expertise in a field say engineering while other have expertise and experience in a different field say business. In an organization individual from various professional background work towards achieving a single goal i.e. making the organization better and in turn making an impact not only on the ones who are part of the organization but also who are outside of the organization. To illustrate, in technology industry it is a very common practice to brainstorm on design of a product and these brainstorming sessions are conducted between teams of software engineers, design engineers, program managers and business managers all these people from different background and expertise bring in plethora of thoughts and inputs which help cover every aspect of a product and hence resulting in a concrete design. Assume if such discussions happen only within team of software engineers then the design which is considered might well be thorough from technology standpoint, but it may lack some business scenarios.
Secondly, every individual has his or her own way of looking and understanding things around him or her and the way they perceive is different than the other individual. when such individuals are brought into a room for discussion various perspectives emerge for similar situation. With variety of perceptions one can make better sense of the situation and way to deal with it. consider the example of a parliament in any democratic country. The parliament is formed of candidates from multiple parties. parties which have different ideologies. candidates which get elected from their constituency come different parties with different agenda’s and ideologies and they discuss on multiple issues impacting the country in the parliament. any bill that needs to be passed as a law must pass via the parliament and when bills are introduced in the house there are debates and discussions that goes on. What comes out these debates and discussions is a thorough analysis of the bill being considered to be passed as a law which has been vetted by representatives from different constituencies and parties and during this process as different views are shared by individuals the bill is amended and reformed to ensure a concrete bill is passed which is beneficial to the country as a whole.
one may argue that discussion among people who have contrasting points of view will spark conflict and effort will be lost in conflict resolution, this downside can easily be weighed down by the positives of the result that we achieve out of discussion among people with contrasting view points and hence to make progress in any part of life it is important that discussions are done and all the view points are understood and covered
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2671.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17635658915 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94408613503 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492248062016 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 123.59113304 60.3974514979 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.117647059 118.986275619 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3529411765 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260716136882 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723762766635 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10229731527 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186656270352 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158903920399 0.0667264976115 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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