In any situation, progress requires discussion among people who have contrasting points of view.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Progress can come from many areas. It comes from the innovation of an individual while other times it comes from the cooperation of two contrasting parties. Many think that the only way to create progress on any situation is thru the act of mediatation between two parties. While this idea may work in many areas of life, it does not work in every situation. There are many situations where progress cannot be found in discussion among people who have opposing views.
One of situations where discussion amongst people who disagree is unfruitful for progress is when there is a power imbalance between two parties. An example of this occurred during the steel mill strike during the industrial revolution. When Andrew Cagernie meet with the works of his steel mills, he held a significant amount of power compared to strikers who opposed him since he had more resources than they did and he controlled the factories that they were striking at. An another example is when an official is talking with a basketball player during a game. The official has the ultimate control in terms of the game since he has the power to remove the player from the game if he wishes to.This will force the argument to be one sided with the official dictating the terms of the progress rather than having a debate about their merits. A discussion between two parties that disagree when one party holds a significant more power over the other will not result in progress since one party holds all the cards.
Armed conflicts is a situation where discussion between opposing sides is not required to create progress. The British tried this tatic when they discussed with Nazi Germany the terms of a nonaggression pact provided that the Nazi received the Rhineland from France. The Nazi invaded Poland shortly afterwards and began their conquest of the world. The British went on to have to defeat Nazi Germany before any peace talks between the Axis and Allied nations could occur. During the war, the soldiers on both sides where more concerned about killing the other person than having a discussion about how to improve relations between their two nations. War and combat is an event where discussion between sides with different interests do not create progress.
Progress marches on in many ways. Sometimes it needs many people and sometimes it takes a few. In the end, progress does not require the collaboration of two groups with vastly different views.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: An example; Another example
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...he player from the game if he wishes to.This will force the argument to be one sided...
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... and began their conquest of the world. The British went on to have to defeat Nazi ...
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Suggestion:
...two groups with vastly different views.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9154589372 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47678313808 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7237599285 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.75 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9 5.21951772744 17% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158008680357 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055152085375 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044851593255 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101041874764 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00789182085685 0.0667264976115 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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