A recent study reported that pet owners have longer, healthier lives on average than do people who own no pets. Specifically, dog owners tend to have a lower incidence of heart disease. In light of these findings, Sherwood Hospital should form a partnership with Sherwood Animal Shelter to institute an adopt-a-dog program. The program would encourage dog ownership for patients recovering from heart disease, which should reduce these patients' chance of experiencing continuing heart problems and also reduce their need for ongoing treatment. As a further benefit, the publicity about the program would encourage more people to adopt pets from the shelter. And that will reduce the incidence of heart disease in the general population.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The adoption of shelter animals is a noble task. Finding ways to decrease heart disease is equally as noble. The argument that the first causes the second could be problematic. It relies on unstated and stated assumptions that would not hold up if the evidence contradicted them. The survey in the first sentence and the assumption that having a pet will decrease heart disease in people who already have heart problems are two examples of this.
The first potential pitfall of the argument is the survey they use in the first sentence. The study could be looking at people who already have heart problems. If this were true, then the argument would be buttressed by this information. This study could be problematic for the argument if it focused on a different group. If the surey only looked at young adults who do not have heart disease, then the survey would not be useful. The survey could be based in another country. The survey could have biased results. In fact, it would be foolish to incorporate if it did not fit the context of the argument. The reason for this is because the survey results would not applicable to the issue. The importance of the context of the survey is key to the author’s argument.
The second assumption is that pets will decrease heart disease for those who have it. This assumption is could make or break the argument. If the author provided additional evidence on this assumption, this assumption would be used to strengthen the argument. An example of this type of evidence would be a study on the effect animals had a patience who had heart problems. This study should be focus in a the same area of the country that the Sherwood hospital is based. However, if this assumption were false, it would wreck the whole argument from the author. If evidence came out that pets did not decrease heart disease in humans who already had it, then this would destroy the entire argument. The unsaid assumption that pets could decrease the heart disease in patiences who have heart problems already is a huge assumption. This assumption could make or break the argument.
Adoption of a shelter animals is important past-time. Discovering ways to lower the risk of heart disease can save countless lives. These two noble causes may not be correlated with each other. This fact would have to decided by the evidence in the survey in the first sentence. It would also be decided by evidence supporting the assumption that pets will decrease heart disease in patients who already have hurt problems.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2049 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.7 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.42 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.034 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.499 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.517 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.459 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...nding ways to decrease heart disease is equally as noble. The argument that the first caus...
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Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...em. The survey in the first sentence and the assumption that having a pet will de...
^^
Line 1, column 448, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eart problems are two examples of this. The first potential pitfall of the argum...
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Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... survey they use in the first sentence. The study could be looking at people who al...
^^^
Line 3, column 628, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...xt of the argument. The reason for this is because the survey results would not applicable...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...is key to the author's argument. The second assumption is that pets will dec...
^^^
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
... for those who have it. This assumption is could make or break the argument. If th...
^^
Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'focused', 'focussed'?
Suggestion: focused; focussed
...ad heart problems. This study should be focus in a the same area of the country that ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...problems. This study should be focus in a the same area of the country that the Sherw...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, then, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 16.3942115768 213% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82110091743 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52574905701 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387614678899 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3046478183 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.4827586207 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0344827586 23.324526521 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.31034482759 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 6.88822355289 261% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139118264333 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483791247006 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597899126514 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106566257158 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0103805118168 0.0628817314937 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 14.3799401198 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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