A recent study reported that pet owners have longer, healthier lives on average than do people who own no pets. Specifically, dog owners tend to have a lower incidence of heart disease. In light of these findings, Sherwood Hospital should form a partnership with Sherwood Animal Shelter to institute an adopt-a-dog program. The program would encourage dog ownership for patients recovering from heart disease, which should reduce these patients' chance of experiencing continuing heart problems and also reduce their need for ongoing treatment. As a further benefit, the publicity about the program would encourage more people to adopt pets from the shelter. And that will reduce the incidence of heart disease in the general population.
The editorial failed to explain the detaild information of the study, the author’s statement feels like more biased toward one particular thing. Author didn’t mention the inforamtion related to dogs types. Also author not mestion the technical side of study.
Parenting a dog will lower a chances of the heart atteck as per study. But author didn’t mention about time interval of the study. And who conducted study?, what is location of study?, what is food intake of a dog’s parent?, Nothing!.The author just believe the statement of study and start promoting it. The author should provide location of the study. It seen that as geography changes density of the heart attack patient also changes. Author failed to convience benefits of parenting a dog.
Moreover, author should give detailed study of the food intake of The parents of dogs. As The doctor always says “it’s all about your eating habits will make you fit.”. Though a parenting a dog is such hectique job and it will also help you to make yor day happy but after some times it’s affect will not seen on your body, as it habitual your body to routine. Author not mention about how the hospital helps to own dog?, author just tell about the process. He/she should also explain the how to train a dog, otherwise it will harm the neighbours.
The author talk about it will help patient heal faster and he/she no need to take treatment. Such bad jocke it is!, how it will affect patient in such less time. I mean in future rather than going to hospital we should let them go to dog house. Where patient finally demise.
In conclusion: Parenting a dog will help you to some extent to being a healthy man/women, but it will not help patient to recover from heart attack or not help them from to stop ongoing treatment.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 320 350
No. of Characters: 1414 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.229 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.419 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.169 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.109 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'dog'.
Suggestion: dog
...os;t mention the inforamtion related to dogs types. Also author not mestion the tech...
^^^^
Line 1, column 217, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... the inforamtion related to dogs types. Also author not mestion the technical side o...
^^^^
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a chance' or simply 'chances'?
Suggestion: a chance; chances
... of study. Parenting a dog will lower a chances of the heart atteck as per study. But a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cation of study?, what is food intake of a dog's parent?, Nothing!.The autho...
^^
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...take of a dog's parent?, Nothing!.The author just believe the statement of st...
^^^
Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...the process. He/she should also explain the how to train a dog, otherwise it will harm ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Where” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tal we should let them go to dog house. Where patient finally demise. In conclusio...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, moreover, so, i mean, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82165605096 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50028397105 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515923566879 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1438288345 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6842105263 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0885100948022 0.218282227539 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335631936184 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312464854822 0.0701772020484 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0518366017427 0.128457276422 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295760537053 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.3799401198 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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