A recent study reported that pet owners have longer, healthier lives on average than do people who own no pets. Specifically, dog owners tend to have a lower incidence of heart disease. In light of these findings, Sherwood Hospital should form a partnership with Sherwood Animal Shelter to institute an adopt-a-dog program. The program would encourage dog ownership for patients recovering from heart disease, which should reduce these patients' chance of experiencing continuing heart problems and also reduce their need for ongoing treatment. As a further benefit, the publicity about the program would encourage more people to adopt pets from the shelter. And that will reduce the incidence of heart disease in the general population.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In a recent study, a statement has been made which is that people who has pets are tend to live longer, healthier than people who doesn’t have pets and Sherwood hospital have to form a partnership with Sherwood Animal shelter to initiate adopt a dog program. The conclusion is made on the assumptions that human beings who have pets are having less heart disease than people who doesn’t have any pets. However, after more light is shed on the issue and more detailed facts are concerned, lack of answers through the argument leads to question its validity.
First of all, how accurate is the study? In other words, did the study include all the people or only few? Maybe study included people who are having heart disease and not having pets and people who are having pets and not having any heart problems. In other words, there is a possibility that people with pets are having heart problems. Maybe people with no pets have lived longer than people who have pets. If the above mentioned assumption is true then the argument is weakened.
Secondly, how is having a dog related to reducing the incidence of heart disease? Having a dog might make a person morally happy but how a dog can stop getting a heart ache to his owner. It is possible that dog can make person healthy as it plays around and human plays with the dog. But that doesn’t mean there is no chance of getting heart disease, If the above scenario is merit, then the argument doesn’t hold water.
Finally, how can having a dog can treat the person’s heart disease? In other words, how can a dog make a person stop going to his or her ongoing treatment? It might be possible that dog keeps person happy but that doesn’t mean he or she gets cured just because he is happy. If dogs can heal a disease related to heart then what is the use of doctors in the society.
To conclude, the argument, stands as of now is considerably flawed. However, if the author provides answers to the above mentioned questions and offers more evidence, then the argument can be possible evaluated.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1631 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.384 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.181 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.586 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...e which is that people who has pets are tend to live longer, healthier than people w...
^^^^
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lived longer than people who have pets. If the above mentioned assumption is true ...
^^^
Line 13, column 285, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he gets cured just because he is happy. If dogs can heal a disease related to hear...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70027247956 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45342088344 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435967302452 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.9 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1680931605 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7894736842 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359236554915 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116854488643 0.0743258471296 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123093877774 0.0701772020484 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186333210024 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138199956724 0.0628817314937 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.3550499002 143% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.197005988 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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