The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy — and generate additional tax revenues — is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell, it is mentioned that best way to ameliorate the Hopewell’s economy and generate additional tax revenues it to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean view. The conclusion is made on the assumptions that building of municipal golf course and resort hotel in Ocean View 2 years ago has increased the tourism and tax revenue rose by 30%. However, after more light is shed on the issue and more detailed facts are concerned, lack of answers through the argument leads me to question its validity.
First of all, is the scenario same since 2 years? The building of golf course and resort hotel happened 2 years ago and the business has increased. But it might be possible that people were interested in golf at that time but now they might not be so interested about golf. Maybe, people’s mindset has changed in the last 2 years. Perhaps, people are now inclined to other sport rather than golf. If the above scenario holds merit, then the argument is weakened.
Secondly, did the revenue increased because of the golf and resort or is it because of the new business? It can be possible that as new business were set up in that are people started coming to see the new business rather than coming for the golf or to the resort hotel. Maybe business from the new ventures was the sole reason for the increase in tourism rather than the golf. If the above assumption is true, then the argument doesn’t hold water as it is deceiving.
Finally, is the condition of Ocean View and Hopewell the same? In other words, do the people of Ocean view and Hopewell think alike? Just because it worked with the people of Ocean View that doesn’t mean it can be worked in any other tourist place. It might be possible that the building the golf in Hopewell exacerbates the situation of that city.
To conclude, the argument, stands as of now is considerably flawed. However if the mayor provides more answers to the above mentioned questions and offers more evidence, then the argument can be evaluated.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1649 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.469 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.326 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.798 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 27, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increase'?
Suggestion: increase
...eakened. Secondly, did the revenue increased because of the golf and resort or is i...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...increased because of the golf and resort or is it because of the new business? It...
^^
Line 17, column 69, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...tands as of now is considerably flawed. However if the mayor provides more answers to t...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71934604905 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53044188109 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455040871935 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3318572332 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1578947368 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270953510522 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846461001817 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924949711289 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140768307155 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951798896045 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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