Benton City residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. During those ten years, local sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol, have increased fourfold, while sales of sulia, a food rarely eaten by the healthiest residents, have declined dramatically. Because of these positive changes in the eating habits of Benton City residents, we predict that the obesity rate in the city will soon be well below the national average.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In the argument, the author implies that the obesity rate is going to go down as the citizens have adopted a healthier lifestyle. He backed his prediction on the survey done on the people and changes made by the citizens in their eating habits. However, his prediction is based on three unwarranted assumptions that needed to be answered to make the argument more persuasive.
First of all, The author assumes that the survey made on people is scientific and viable. It may happen that, the survey made on the people has a scientific basis at all. Maybe some random questions were asked on the social media and the authenticity of the answers may never be tested. There is a potential that few people answered those questions who actually represent only a small portion of the total population.If this is true, then the survey will be of dubious authenticity. Even if the survey is accurate, Perhaps the standard set by the government has changed a lot during the ten year period. It may have been adjusted or even declined and that's the reason behind the conformation, not that the dwellers has actually adopted a healthy eating habit. If one of the aforementioned cases are true then it will jeopardize the viability of authors argument.
Secondly, he assumes that people's eating kiran is an indication of their adoption to a healthier lifestyle which may not necessarily be the case. perhaps, they are eating more kiran as the price of other food items has gone high, or kiran is widely available. In reality, it may be the case that, They are least concerned about their eating habit and stuffing themselves with fast food than ever. Some questions may also be raised about the health benefits of kiran. The author surmises that kiran reduces cholesterol based on only one study, maybe more scientific research is needed to prove kiran's effectivity. In any of these cases, the author's argument will be less likely to hold water.
Finally, the author predicts that the obesity rate will decline below the national level as if people of Benton are the only ones who are going through this kind of change. They may not be an outlier in adopting a healthy lifestyle. Maybe the people of other cities are more concerned about a healthier lifestyle than are the people of Benton.If this is the case then the obesity rate of the Benton city may decline but not certainly below the national level.
The author's backing of his argument based on the aforementioned unwarranted claims makes his argument less genial.To make it more persuasive more study should be done on the peoples eating habit and the effectiveness of the food they are eating to maintain good health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88840262582 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59466011402 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45295404814 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2964667399 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.7 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153219715948 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481881939867 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451824156586 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885795325506 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240003891311 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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