The best way for a society to prepare its young people forleadership in government, industry, or other fields is byinstilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for
leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by
instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Whenever people argue that history is a worthless subject or that
there is nothing to be gained by just “memorizing a bunch of stupid
names and dates,” I simply hold my tongue and smile to myself.
What I’m thinking is that, as cliche as it sounds, you do learn a
great deal from history (and woe to those who fail to learn those
lessons). It is remarkable to think of the number of circumstances
and situations in which even the most rudimentary knowledge of
history will turn out to be invaluable. Take, for example, the issue
at hand here. Is it better for society to instill in future leaders a
sense of competition or cooperation? Those who have not examined
leaders throughout time and across a number of fields might not
have the ability to provide a thorough and convincing answer to
this question, in spite of the fact that it is crucial to the future
functioning of our society. Looking closely at the question of
leadership and how it has worked in the past, I would have to agree
that the best way to prepare young people for leadership roles is to
instill in them a sense of cooperation.
Let us look first at those leaders who have defined themselves
based on their competitiveness. Although at first glance it may
appear that a leader must have a competitive edge in order to gain
and then maintain a leadership position, I will make two points on
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this subject. First, the desire to compete is an inherent part of
human nature; that is, it is not something that needs to be “instilled”
in young people. Is there anyone who does not compete in some
way or another every single day? You try to do better than others in
your school work or at the office, or you just try to do better than
yourself in some way, to push yourself. When societies instill
competitiveness in their leaders, it only leads to trouble. The most
blatant example in this case is Adolf Hitler, who took competition
to the very extreme, trying to prove that his race and his country
were superior to all. We do not, however, need to look that far to
find less extreme examples (i.e., Hitler is not the extreme example
that disproves the rule). The recent economic meltdown was caused
in no large part by the leaders of American banks and financial
institutions who were obsessed with competing for the almighty
dollar. Tiger Woods, the ultimate competitor in recent golfing
history and in many ways a leader who brought the sport of golf to
an entirely new level, destroyed his personal life (and perhaps his
career -- still yet to be determined) by his overreaching sense that
he could accomplish anything, whether winning majors or sleeping
with as many women as possible. His history of competitiveness is
well documented; his father pushed him froma very early age to be
the ultimate competitor. It served him well in some respects,
but it also proved to be detrimental and ultimately quite destructive.

Leaders who value cooperation, on the other ahnd, have historically
been less prone to these overreaching, destructive tendencies. A
good case in point would be Abraham Lincoln. Now, I am sure
at this point you are thinking that Lincoln, who served as President
during the Civil War and who refused to compromise with the
South or allow secession, could not possibly be my model of
cooperation! Think, however, of the way Lincoln structured his
Cabinet. He did not want a group of “yes men” who would agree
with every word he said, but instead he picked people who were
more likely to disagree with his ideas. And he respected their input,
which allowed him to keep the government together in the North
during a very tumultuous period (to say the least).

My point in choosing the Lincoln example is that competitiveness
and conflict may play better to the masses and be more likely to be
recorded in the history books, but it was his cooperative nature that
allowed him to govern effectively. Imagine if the CEO of a large
company were never able to compromise and insisted that every
single thing be done in exactly her way. Very quickly she would
lose the very people that a company needs in order to survive,
people with new ideas, people ready to make great advances.
Without the ability to work constructively with those who have
conflicting ideas, a leader will never be able to strike deals, reach
consensus, or keep an enterprise on track. Even if you are the
biggest fish in the pond, it is difficult to force your will on others
forever; eventually a bigger fish comes along (or the smaller fish
team up against you!).
In the end, it seems most critical for society to instill in young
people a sense of cooperation. In part this is true because we seem
to come by our competitive side more naturally, but cooperation is
more often something we struggle to learn (just think of kids on the
playground). And although competitive victory is more showy,
more often than not the real details of leadership come down to the
ability to work with other people, to compromise and cooperate.
Getting to be President of the United States or the managing
director of a corporation might require you to win some battles,
but once you are there you will need diplomacy and people-skills.
Those can be difficult to learn, but if you do not have them, you
are likely to be a short-lived leader.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , &apos
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Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'Those cans'?
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...will need diplomacy and people-skills. Those can be difficult to learn, but if you do no...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'well', 'for example', 'in spite of']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.203984819734 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.169829222011 0.157235817809 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0740037950664 0.0880659088768 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0683111954459 0.0497285424764 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0654648956357 0.0444667217837 147% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.105313092979 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0275142314991 0.0406280797675 68% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88922778147 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.050284629981 0.030933414821 163% => OK
Particles: 0.000948766603416 0.0016655270985 57% => OK
Determiners: 0.0863377609108 0.0997080785238 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170777988615 0.0249443105267 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0218216318786 0.0148568991511 147% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 5487.0 2732.02544248 201% => OK
No of words: 944.0 452.878318584 208% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8125 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.54297600495 4.58838876751 121% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3125 0.366273622748 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.228813559322 0.280924506359 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.150423728814 0.200843997647 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0974576271186 0.132149295362 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88922778147 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 440.0 219.290929204 201% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466101694915 0.48968727796 95% => OK
Word variations: 64.8360932969 55.4138127331 117% => OK
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6194690265 175% => OK
Sentence length: 26.2222222222 23.380412469 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1841005657 59.4972553346 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.416666667 141.124799967 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 23.380412469 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.361111111111 0.674092028746 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 83.0 4.94800884956 1677% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 49.1035781544 51.4728631049 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.109375 1.64882698954 67% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404017364016 0.391690518653 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114056851822 0.123202303941 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0754562651041 0.077325440228 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.79808811131 0.547984918172 146% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.256476655231 0.149214159877 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142983156712 0.161403998019 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931010633098 0.0892212321368 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.0722951359837 0.385218514788 19% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0638338115784 0.0692045440612 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987327764409 0.275328986314 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715929413854 0.0653680567796 110% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.30420353982 264% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 3.66592920354 246% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 28.0 13.5995575221 206% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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