The best way for the society to prepare its young people for leadership
Although a reasonable person might argue that cooperation should be preferred over competition for overall development of the society, I believe a balanced approach is necessary and taking an extreme approach is not beneficial. In my view, cultivating seeds of cooperation and not competition may make individuals less competent; it is equally necessary to compete in a healthy way.
Let us consider the case of governments and reflect back how these organizations have changed with time. In earlier days the countries were mostly ruled under a single king, the system termed as a monarchy. Over time, these governments have become large organizations where the power is more distributed. One of the most successful countries in the world, the United States, follows democracy. The founding stone of democracy is cooperation, the government is run in cooperation with people for the benefit of society.
From the example of governments let us now move towards sports. In the very first lesson, a sports' teacher emphasizes the idea of team-players and cooperation. For instance, in Cricket it is important that players perform as a team and make it win. When a player is bowling the ball it is very important that the other players, fielders, also concentrate and prevent the opponents from making runs. And it has been observed that if the fielders chose to not perform well, a single bowler in no way can make the team win.
It is also equally important to appreciate competitiveness. For example, if we take a closer look at the governments, they are competitive as well. The epitome of competitiveness is the very well known race of countries for being first in various avenues like space, transportation, telecommunication etc. Different nations spend their money and resources in order to be the first in either reaching Mars, making biofuels, creating nuclear weapons and so on. This competitiveness brings the best out of any particular nation, it accelerates the growth of the country as a whole at a much faster pace. Additionally, in sports, there are many one-player games like boxing, shooting, swimming and so on. It is very important to be competitive and carefully understand how the competitors' strategies.
To me, adopting an approach which best fits the situation is necessary. And so it is necessary to have an understanding of the views, cooperation and competition. As we see from the aforementioned examples of government and sports, in different scenarios we have to make a choice among one of these options and none is supreme over the other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14523809524 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17677495158 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552380952381 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2139166323 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2272727273 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107946618712 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302793380749 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431191357183 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552621930209 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181731796606 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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