The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

To foster future leaders, a society must allow children to fulfill their potential. At school and at home, adults must inculcate values, such as humility and kindness, within the younger generation so that they can develop into apt leaders in the future. Among these values, cooperation is indisputably one of the most important characteristic children must develop. However, cooperation alone is not enough. Collaboration, along with a healthy sense of competition, is the key to creating great leaders.

Because we live in a world that is increasingly connected, it is essential for people to work together. It is impossible to be isolated and live in complete solidarity. Therefore, from a young age, children are highly encouraged to cooperate with one another. From the moment we enter school, students are constantly asked to form groups and work together to solve problems. Whether it is simply building a sand castle as a group or solving a math problem with a partner, young people are constantly pushed to cooperate. By learning how to rely on teammates to overcome challenges and brainstorm to find new solutions as a group, people utilize this sense of collaboration they learn at home or at school to succeed in a given field.

Yet, instilling only a sense of cooperation is not enough to drive children to become fruitful. A healthy sense of competition is crucial. Cooperation alone does not motivate students enough to achieve their potential and put in effort. It is the reward from a competition that will help young children find the need to do well. Once children realize the taste of accomplishment when they win from a competition, it will be motivating for them to do even better next time and into the future. Great leaders are created when people are pushed to their limits and produce the best outcome they can achieve. Without competition and only cooperation, there will be less need for a person to do become successful.

Extreme competition is a stifling factor that may hinder children from achieving their potential, given the pressure and stress of the need to win. However, an environment of beneficial competition will galvanize students to try their best in a given assignment. In developing such auspicious competition, one must first eliminate any negative consequence of loss, such as critisicm or punishment. Instead, adults must accolade all children for their hard work in trying their best to win, while providing conspicuous awards for the winners. For instance, in the classroom, a teacher may ask children to form groups for a science project. While articulating that the best science project will receive bonus points, the teacher should recognize all groups for their effort in putting the project together. In such competitive enivronment, young students will be inspired to try their best in a given task to be rewarded.

As such, in developing future leaders, a society must instill not only collaboration but also competition. With both elements, we will be able to drive children try their best together.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 500.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.148 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94080533188 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9915520174 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5185185185 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150716368332 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470328786058 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297867347595 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850367412822 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344481996613 0.0667264976115 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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