The best way for a society to prepare its young people
for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is
by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not
competition.
‘Write a response in which you discuss the extent to
which you agree or disagree with the claim. In
developing and supporting your position, be sure to
address the most compelling reasons and/or examples
that could be used to challenge your position
Competition has become vital and ubiquitous in today's progressing world. Sometimes competition is intrinsic for the field, sometimes it is not explicitly required but the feeling of competition is almost palpable. Competiting against one another is one of the inveterate habit of people in the government. The prompt suggests that young people should be instilled with a sense of cooperation rather than competition for leadership in any field. I mostly agree with the statement and validate my support with the following two reasons.
Firstly, a society should be more cooperative that competitive for its progress. Young people are the future of out society, they will be highly motivated and want to take leadership position in every aspect of their life. They should be taught how to cooperate with various kinds of people, how to deal with the situation if the things go south and much more. For example, the current russian and ukraine war could have been eschewed if both the countries had the people in the highest position who were more cooperative rather than competetive. They could have solved the issued by tedious conversations or by signing a treaty. This closely explains our promt that the young people should learn from this and also be taught cooperation rather than competition.
Secondly, a sense of cooperation can help the young people take decision during an adverse situation. The ability to make astute decision during a crisis is an ability that young leader should possess. For example, if there is a leader of a committee then the leader should be coperative rather than trying to compete with its subsequent others. The leader should listen to the whole committee while taking a decision rather than forming a decision on their own to compete with other committee or leaders. This can happen while formulating an event and much more. The leader should be cooperative rather than competitive while leading a committee as a lot of other juniors or members would be looking at him as a idol.
Finally, competition is ubiquitous today and can't be avoided. The leader shouldn't be just competitve ofcouse a slight sense of competiton is good but that should not be ruled over while making a decision.
In conclusion, young people should be instilled with a sense of cooperation rather than competition to help them prosper in their field. A great leader always cooperates with everyone instead of competiting with them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 712, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s or members would be looking at him as a idol. Finally, competition is ubiqu...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ly, competition is ubiquitous today and cant be avoided. The leader shouldnt be just...
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Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...s today and cant be avoided. The leader shouldnt be just competitve ofcouse a slight sen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10945273632 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75538809613 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490049751244 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3790616684 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.8095238095 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189583328565 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715308313534 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682424824184 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12561598104 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643670295678 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.