The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

The scenario always changes based on how the young minds are brought up. Infusing a correct set of rules and sense of understanding of the skills and behavior in the professional world is an integrate part of raising the young minds. The claim focuses on how instilling a sense of cooperation instead of competition is the 'best' way to prepare young minds. I would like to put forward three points to showcase my thoughts on the extent to which I highly disagree.

There is no one way to make sure that the young people are best prepared for something. Cooperation is a major factor to incorporate while leading an industry or a governement but that is not enough. If there is no competition, there exists no fire to compete for a position in the world. The more you challenge yourself, the better and harder you work to achieve a goal. If the youth is prepared for no competition, there will be no one to compete with thus reducing the fire inside the leaders.

Lack of competition also affects the entire system of industry. Without competition, there would be no challenge for a young mind to overpower the another. This could lead to reduced usage of the potential of the leader. For instance, there are two company leaders manufacturing steel. If both of them are at a same level of business, a sense of no competition mindset would not force them to overtake the another in any prospects of the industry. On the other hand, if there is a competition, both the leaders would push to their maximum potential to make sure their company produces the steel more effeciently and with better productivity. Thus lack of competition could highly affect the mindsets of yound leaders by not allowing them to reach their maximum potential.

Moreover, cooperation does not always work. If the leaders work in cooperation, there would be no challenge for the employees to work for a better company. If there is no competition, the employees would not have the purpose to make themselves better to enter a better organization. So not only the potential of leaders is in risk, but that of employees is too. To make sure that the young mindsets to not limit themselves to a certain extent of thinking and innovation, competition has to be there.

Competition can sometimes turn into using negative or faulty tricks to compete with the opponent. So I think it is necessary to focus on how to put up a healthy competition rather than not having competition at all. Cooperation is necessary but not on the level of sacrificing a sense of competition.

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... the extent to which I highly disagree. There is no one way to make sure that th...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, as to, for instance, i think, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77375565611 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86006856905 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441176470588 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8922945967 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.9166666667 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4166666667 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239606299985 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669602661837 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575766258474 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126723779277 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528039223546 0.0667264976115 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?


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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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