Will it really help a society to instill a sense of cooperation without competition? Does cooperation only will lead them to be great leaders, industrialists etc? Many of us would say no. I believe that a competitive instinct is necessary for the people of a society in order to flourish. A healthy sense of competition paves the way for better future for a nation in every walk of life. Reflecting upon the leadership of a corrupt politician and a scientist seeking greatness in innovation and design, one can discern how both the sense of cooperation and competition is essential.
To begin with, people nowadays are especially teteering away from politics and government leaderships, especially in Pakistan, beacuse every politician seems like a hoaxer waiting to pilfer people of his or her country. A corrupt politician induces people with negativity and people who espy these traits in a leader want someone who will lead a nation towards prosperity. So, if only cooperation wil be ingrained in people, there is very little chance that people will go against the leader who is taking the nation towards anarchy and decimation. If there is also a competing trait in people, they would want to change that and be in power to save the nation from extirpation. So, the importance of a sense of competion trumps a sense of cooperation.
On the other hand, on can take an example of a scientist who wants to revolutionalize the face of science. The scientist working under another well-known scientist following his orders and theories in order to cooperate with his superior and learn from him, may lose his creativity and new ideas of invention because the superior does not believe in them and the fact they cannot be proven unless worked upon. Here, if a competition of any sort existed, the scientist would want to bring to life his creative ideas for the betterment of people. Although being a scientist, the superior disregards his ideas, but his ideas were just ass
By my reckoning, the best way for a society to prepare its people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them both the sense of cooperation and competition. Because cooperation would lead them to win hearts and minds and competition would challenge them to excel and take the nation towards betterment.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, still, well, as for, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95641025641 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90130102988 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505128205128 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0049618269 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.8125 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171182147005 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635833333723 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754186891295 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132008770119 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105266701279 0.0667264976115 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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