Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation must be the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Reason: Great achievements by a nation's rulers, artists, or scientists will ensure a good life for the majority of that nation's people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Does the contributions made by scientists, rulers or artists of a nation its only source of recognition? Or it is the lay man that really makes a country known to the world? Many of us will have ambivalent views on this one. In my opinion the large part of a nation’s acknowledgement is due to the achievements or controversies on behalf of the scientists, rulers or artists. Reflecting upon William Shakespeare and Dr. Abdul Qadeer Khan, we can see that how the scientists and artists make an impact on the country’s image.
Most of the world knows about the great writer, poet and actor William Shakespeare. Regarded as the greatest writer in the history of English language and the world’s pre-eminent dramatist, he was the one who brought glory to the England because of his great novels and plays. His works like Macbeth, Othello Hamlet are considered the most amazing tragic works ever produced. His works contain comedies, tragedies and romances are well-known all around the world and have also been translated into many other languages and there people also regard him as a prolific writer. His most amazing work Rome and Juliet have been adapted by many movie makers across the globe and his novel Macbeth transpired to be the basis of many great tragic stories following it. It is because of these great achievements that England became to be known as Romantic and people from across the globe still go to Stratford-upon-Avon, where he was born, for the sanctity and legacy he left.
Another instance can be taken of scientists who bring accolades and recognition to a nation by their discoveries. Dr. Abdul Qadeer Khan, a renowned nuclear physicist was the pioneer of making Pakistan a nuclear power. It was his work that earned Pakistan and Muslims a recognition in the whole world. His discovery and methods led him to several national awards. He was also called to other countries like United States, for his work. There is a long going controversy about his actions and involvement in the nuclear weapon proliferation. Yet, he is known to be a Pakistani Scientist that got acclamation and recognition for his work and his nation and through the initiatives he took other nations were able to collaborate with Pakistan ensuring good lives to the people.
All in all, I believe that both the countries powerful and erudite people and commoner can make a difference and lead their nation towards prosperity and greatness. However, the greater part of it is because of the scientists and artist that communicate to the world through their compositions and innovations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e also regard him as a prolific writer. His most amazing work Rome and Juliet have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, still, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0069124424 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91852544604 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52534562212 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5875685211 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.65 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203477335837 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060227331961 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656151004884 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12022919197 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561436982033 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.