Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Scandals are a controversial topic. Some people will say that scandals actually drive peoples’ attention to the problems and play a certain role in the eye opening. However, others will refute that scandals are misleading and only way to divert people’s attention from a burning issue. I, on the other hand believe that the roles scandals play hold disparate significance in the context and domain to which the scandal belongs to. These facts could be better comprehended through the scandals relating to show business and Governments.
For instance, the scandal is about an actress or model that had a wardrobe malfunction while walking on the ramp. The media very flamboyantly broadcasts the news or write articles in newspapers and magazines with pictures of the actual scenario. And sometimes the issue is not so significant or weighty as it is exaggerated and showed to the people.And that it was not as big of malfunction and it was handled properly. This might not affect the model or actress, because it is their job and they might have been through worse. Here comes the fact that the issue was not there to begin with and that it was a scandal for no rhyme or reason. And as they say in the show business that “There is no such thing as bad publicity.” The actress or model may have gotten more work because of it.
In contrast, there was a recent scenario of a ruling prime minister, who has continuously embezzled money from the government funds in order to satiate his personal needs and has invested in businesses outside the country in order to triple that amount of money, was just impeached and interdicted for his actions. He was suspended and tried in the court of law. This whole prime minister debacle was on the news for three months until the verdict came out and he was held accountable for his actions. Since this was such a considerable issue. The media did not stop and other scandals of the minister’s dual nationality and business that were long hiding and concealed were unveiled like that.
So, by my reckoning, a scandal’s true vitality depends upon the territory of context and how pertinent it actually is in discerning a problem and also how it is able to make other complications conspicuous to the people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...is exaggerated and showed to the people.And that it was not as big of malfunction a...
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Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e was held accountable for his actions. Since this was such a considerable issue. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in contrast, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89175257732 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85623296399 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546391752577 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0204652371 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.647058824 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8235294118 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109006297768 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376478202718 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031069203124 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648408996851 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497252294736 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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