The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
The claim presented here by the author states that the sense of cooperation among young people should be instilled rather than the sense of competition. It is also mentioned that the sense of cooperation is required in fields like leadership in government, industry etc. According to author, this claim seems quite right whereas there are some arenas where competition only can help in advancing the knowledge and growth of young people. It highly depends on the field which is being considered whether the young person should behave in competitive or cooperative manner. Therefore, I am slightly in agreement with the claim presented by the author, though not wholly supporting it.
To support the agreement with the claim presented by author, we should notice the importance of cooperation in the life of young people. To mention an example, we can consider the pivotal role that team works plays in any company in corporate world. In any organization running in the corporate world like manufacturing, software engineering, product development etc. to name a few, if cooperation is replaced by competition is replaced at every single place, it will be difficult to manage the employees and produce effective work. Cooperation with one another is highly required in these fields. And if the young people only compete with each other in the company, then organization's future is in danger for sure.
In addition, if there is no competition between the politicians to win the votes for the government and no one is competing for the role rather cooperating with each other. Everyone working in the favor of the people of country or nation, it would be really good. We can also argue that lesser competition will let the politicians to think more about the actual doing rather than pleasing the people for the sake of votes. May be it seems far-fetched but that much among cooperation among the politicians may lead to fall of democracy. All the politicians working together, all for their benefits and in dearth of competition, there would be no one to raise fingers against them.
Therefore, the competitive thinking is sometimes required to foster the desire to concoct better strategies and products. Competition gives a sense of priority to the task. Competitive thinking allows to find out the loopholes and defects in order to perform better, and can produce effective ideas. Competition with constructive criticism can be useful for the society. Taking example of politicians which was mentioned earlier in the paragraph, that the politicians can use paucity of competition among themselves in a way to fool the people as there would be no one to provide criticism on their actions. If competition is present, the opponents would surely criticize and analyze every aspect of their action.
Hence, the sense of cooperation is required to produce the effective results but the lack of competition can produce a state of monopoly among any field. The presence of the sense of competition among young people is required to cater the criticism and feedback to the other people in the field. This will foster the desire to work better for effective results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...asing the people for the sake of votes. May be it seems far-fetched but that much amon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, really, so, still, then, therefore, whereas, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2652.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1098265896 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83922466247 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45472061657 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7321028892 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.08 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.76 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259884711331 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769352140257 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642703097051 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15584521185 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491894465687 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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