"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

Essay topics:

"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

Leading a nation requires all of its people to cooperate to the best of their abilities. However, there are places and things that require competition to be just as significant if not more. Although I think that a sense of cooperation is most important in preparing a nation's young generation for leadership, competition is nonetheless a very important factor that cannot be disregarded.

First of all, Cooperation helps people work to their strengths. Every single human has his/her strengths and weaknesses. While in a competition method one would have to overcome his/her weak points and thus address every point on his own, cooperation can exploit the fact that when one is weak is a specific part, there might be another person who is strong at it. Without spending months or years of precious time, one can then focus on his/her strengths and thus further the growth of the country. Where a CEO who is outstandingly articulate when giving speeches falls short when it comes to making decision, he can overcome it by having diverse set of views from his solicitors and maybe his thoughtful secretary thus creating a system of cooperation where he can exploit the strengths of all minimizing each others weakness. Cooperation thus becomes a valuable tool when pushing a person to strenghthen his strong points.

Additionally, Cooperation helps people build a healthy and genial environment that is easier to work in. When people are subjected to a system that doesn't force them to constantly improve to just keep pace with the system, they can focus more on the points that need improving in order to be more useful. A person writing a novel can focus more on the writing and not on the numerous typos and spelling mistakes he tends to make solely beacause of the fact that he has other people helping him who can take care of them. He can then put all of his efforts into improving his writing and the strengths of his composition rather than going back every five minutes to see whether he has made a mistake or not. Cooperation thus saves time and effort by making people do what they do best and improve them even further.

Finally, all of these advocacy of cooperation can never undermine the importance that competition has on a workspace. A sense of competition is just what one needs to keep pushing him to his limits, to keep strengthening himself against all the odds. When there is no competition, no reason to fall out of the loop, people tend to become complacent and there are many people who do better if there is competition in the workplace as opposed to there being none. A company's CEO when thinking that if he doesn't improve on his management skills just as he is adept at his oratorial skills will get replaced by another competent person will do his best to stay on the competition and thus making self-improvement. Similarly, this self-improvement is exactly what one needs to lead a country, its people and its government, industry or other fields. Competition is therefore very important to keep people reminding of his or her weakness and adress them as time passes by.

In conclusion, a sense of cooperation is just as important as workplace competition to ensure the young genarations the tools that they need to lead the country. Therefore, not choosing a single one rather having a strong and necessary combination of the two is necessary to best prepare one to life's challenges.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 267, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...peration is most important in preparing a nations young generation for leadership, compet...
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Line 3, column 813, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...it the strengths of all minimizing each others weakness. Cooperation thus becomes a va...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n people are subjected to a system that doesnt force them to constantly improve to jus...
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Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advocacy' or 'these advocacies'?
Suggestion: this advocacy; these advocacies
...e them even further. Finally, all of these advocacy of cooperation can never undermine the ...
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Line 7, column 503, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...A companys CEO when thinking that if he doesnt improve on his management skills just a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2841.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 585.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85641025641 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83473750512 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452991452991 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 881.1 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8890251587 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.136363636 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5909090909 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11387569077 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410021550995 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416193548779 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0800639993527 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411693119402 0.0667264976115 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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