The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.’
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Many claims that it is by fighting that people most develop their expertise, because when they are submited to competitive situations, in which they have to prove their capabilities to others, they learn how to assume a position of leadership. I disagree with that assumption. I do think that people`s skill improve more when they learn how to work together as they can analyze problems from several perspectives.
First of all, a competitive enviroment can be detrimental to a person because he can think it is only possible to be effective if he fights against his oponents. That is not true as a lot of accomplishments depends on the cooperation among individuals. For example, in a country, it is necessary that the states work in harmony with each other in order to develop good policies to the coutry as a whole. If each governor assumes a competitive position against other governors, the country may not benefit from the policies provided by them.
On the other hand, by being instilled in a sense of cooperation, a leader of any institution can alloy the skills of the members of its team in order to accomplish better results. Even in military field that is something possible. The end of the Second World War, for instance, ws only possible because countries worked together to defeat the Nazi. Hardly a single country would succeed to do so by working by itself.
Last but not least, when people cooperate they start to see the problems by other`s perspectives. Working in a team, firstly a person contributes with the knowledges they are most expert on. As time goes by, they become more and more involved in the process as a whole and they begin to fill their knowledge gaps from others expertise. In a competitive milieu, conversely, people may get frustrated by having to diverge with others most of the time. This will, eventually, affect the enterprise`s outcomes.
To sum up, by being competitive leaders can create a noxious enviroment to their team and enfeeble their perspectives of increase. Instilling in them a sense of cooperation, however, may instigate them to work together and fill their knowledge gaps by learning from each others` expertise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Hardly' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...ies worked together to defeat the Nazi. Hardly a single country would succeed to do so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, so, still, for example, for instance, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01089918256 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00843846331 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517711171662 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.166389811 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.166666667 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3888888889 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129513931222 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406733259107 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402067449859 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763039775835 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213084214168 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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