I partially agree with this statement. I believe cooperation and competition, both is necessary to prepare young people for leadership. Without competition there will be no eagerness to excell. Cooperation is also important because we can not run a government or industry alone, we need cooperation.
First, Competition is a vital element for success. For example, in a industry or corporation if there is no competition, then employee will not try to become best of their field. If they can not excel what they do then they can never be good leader. Again suppose in a school there is no grading system and student do not compete each other, then student will eventually lose interest and will not focus on their study. So competition is compusory for leadership and success.
Furthermore, if we want to build our nation, our industry or any other field we can not do it alone. collective effor is needed for success. For building leadership cooperation is also imortant. For example, in 1947 Mahatma Ghandi 's leadership brought India freedom. But he did not do it alone. Mass people of India's support and cooperation was behind this achievemnt. Again, in a government office if someone wants to pass a bill which will make improvement to our society, he or she can not do it alone. It has to be done collectively. So cooperation a basic requirement for growing leadership among young people.
On the other hand, some people argue that too much competition makes people frustrated and sometimes evil. But it totally depends on people's moral basic and mental condition. For example, when two big rival corporation compete each other to get bigger share of market, they might start corruption and do it in unethical way. But we have laws for that and and if we make them obey law then this kind of situation can be avoided. So competition does not make young people frustrated, it actually prepare them for leadership.
In conclusion, even though too much competition or cooperation might be a bad thing, but they are the two component for leadership and young people should be motivated to practice both.
- Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as 58
- "Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned wit 63
- Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as 50
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism. 3
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...al element for success. For example, in a industry or corporation if there is no ...
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Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... not try to become best of their field. If they can not excel what they do then th...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en student will eventually lose interest and will not focus on their study. So co...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Collective
...any other field we can not do it alone. collective effor is needed for success. For buildi...
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Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'corporation' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'corporations'.
Suggestion: corporations
...dition. For example, when two big rival corporation compete each other to get bigger share ...
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Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... market, they might start corruption and do it in unethical way. But we have laws...
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Line 7, column 353, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...nethical way. But we have laws for that and and if we make them obey law then this kind...
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Line 7, column 496, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'prepares'?
Suggestion: prepares
...ke young people frustrated, it actually prepare them for leadership. In conclusion, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 58.6224719101 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93557422969 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86497799745 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515406162465 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2293465298 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4166666667 118.986275619 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.875 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294276541991 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917418664975 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876942345521 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172207403328 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428246801646 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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