The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement here suggests that by instilling in young people a sense of cooperation instead of competition, they can be prepared in the best way for leadership in government, industry, or other fields. Although, I agree with the statement mostly, but I do not agree with the fact that sense of competion is not required for leadership roles.
Firstly, leadership is a quality that requires an understanding of the needs of the people. One can achieve this if he or she has a sense of cooperation towards others. For example, a textile industry CEO should be able to tell if his staff is happy with their work, or whether or not all of their customers are happy. All of them may have different set of needs, which will require the CEO to adjust a few things trying to cooperate with them. Furthermore, It is better for the industry and its people if the CEO is aware of his or her staff or business associates.
One can take any field that requires leadership, may it be government or an industry or it can be an IT company developing softwares, the one factor that stands out in all of these fields is that all of them have people. So if a person can understand their needs or problems by getting along with them, that not only makes the people happy and encouraged, but also makes the government or industry to be at their best side. There is no better feeling than knowing that your leader understands you and he will cooperate with you in good times and bad.
Although, having a sense of cooperation is very important for a leader to have, we cannot ignore the fact that to become a leader one will always have competition. If a leadership role is available in government or an industry, there will always be a few people who would want to be in that position. So have a sense of competition would really help out in standing out amongst the people who would be applying for the role. Furthermore, its easy to
3. while cooperation is very important, competion is also
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[2]
Message: Consider using 'do disagree that' or 'do agree that'.
Suggestion: do disagree that; do agree that
... agree with the statement mostly, but I do not agree with the fact that sense of competion is not required for ...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... his staff is happy with their work, or whether or not all of their customers are happy. All o...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
... government or an industry or it can be an IT company developing softwares, the one f...
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Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...nment or an industry or it can be an IT company developing softwares, the one factor th...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...ole. Furthermore, its easy to 3. while cooperation is very important, competio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, really, so, still, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57983193277 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70549376382 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46218487395 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 510.3 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4913584983 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282522613351 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948768989123 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113623390807 0.0758088955206 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156000194876 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136964187689 0.0667264976115 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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