When looking at the evolution of the world, there has been no time where there was more competition than in the last century. Before the 20th Century farmers cooperated to produce food, maintain the fields and take care of the animals. Competition was present between different families or communities but not between the individuals. Yet in 20th century, with the industrial revolution and the possibility to ameliorate your life, people began to think for themselves. They challenged the cooperative institutions such as the churches and competition was now widely present between different individuals. This competition enabled the 20th century to be the century were society has evolved the most in terms of knowledge.
First, let’s take look at Japan, a country were cooperation primes before competition, where a good society is more important than a happy inhabitant. The car industry is one of their most important workplaces. Inhabitants work as robots together to achieve the best results possible, yet this is also the country with the highest suicidal rate. This is a prime example of why pure cooperation does not lead to a better outcome.
Second, let’s zoom in on Switzerland, a country where everyone acts in their own interest. This mindset drives the whole society forward as each individual is challenged to be the best version of themselves. Incentives such as money are the most effective means to create competition. In such a country, where competition primes over cooperation there is no place to be lazy. One cannot take advantage of the system by ignoring the duties but accepting the advantages.
Lastly, an important note to make to these prior examples is that this competitive mind-set is needed in industries, the government or other fields. Yet we cannot forget our human side that must help the less fortunate who are in real trouble. People who are ill or shelterless should not be left alone. The cooperative aspect can thus not be completely ruled out but should be present in difficult times.
In conclusion, one can argue that a cooperative mind-set on a big scale leads to lazy people who take advantage of the system yet a competitive mind-set challenges each individual to improve and thus improves the society as a whole. Thus the leaders of tomorrow should be trained to be competitive with themselves and with the others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 234, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...d thus improves the society as a whole. Thus the leaders of tomorrow should be train...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, look, second, so, thus, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13881748072 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90655137915 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521850899743 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1617778426 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1904761905 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61904761905 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.065424801269 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0194710974895 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228595085256 0.0758088955206 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0379074666822 0.150359130593 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146938338509 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.