"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The world is always at a competition with one another, hardly ever a unison of cooperation. In order to improve the future, it's best to emphasize on the importance of cooperation in our young generation of leaders.
There are countless examples of how competitive leaderships have worsen our government, industry and other types of fields. Everyone is a fight to be the best, to buy out each, and be the only one in their respective fields. This type of behaviors demotes the value of working together and building veracity amongst each other. Through cooperation, there will be a willingness to listen and understand the needs of everyone. Ideas will not be pushed aside because they don't sound fruitful to the person in charge. Cooperative learning promotes empathy, amiability and trust. For example in classroom, a group of students pick an individual to be the director of their project. If the leader disregards all the other student's opinion and decides his is the best, everyone will be angered and relunctant to work. With a group leader that will listen and produce a project is based on the decision made by all, the group will be sucessful and willing to work hard for their leader. It's important for the role a leader to not become superlicious because this is exactly where problems will arise.
Cooperation teaches the skills of a compassionate leader; they understand what is necessary for their people, company and more. Competition will teach them that this role is almost as a game and they must win every time. With that type perspective, they are willing to do anything, including valitily, to reach to the top. The egotistic character is what is seen in most of today's leaders, regardless of what fields they are in. These leaders don't have a sense of cooperation with the world, only to themselves and whoever immediate to helping them get rid of others. There are companies that buy out smaller ones and run others out of business. It becomes a monopoly and extremely horrible for the society. No one benefits from these type of behavior other than the leader. For the better of our society, we must instill cooperation in our young generations.
Although cooperation is the best for society, a little competition never hurt anyone. It allows may increase a leader's motivation to work harder. They compete against time or current policies that goes against bettering society. WIthout competition, many people feel bored or passive. This obviously varies in certain people, but sometimes a little competition is what pushes someone to work 110%.
As the world is filled with countless examples of competitive leaders, it is not a positive outcome. By instilling a sense of cooperation, society will prevail better results for their current and future generations. Cooperation promotes qualities that can overcome competitive natures and problems cau
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
...les of how competitive leaderships have worsen our government, industry and other type...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...s will not be pushed aside because they dont sound fruitful to the person in charge....
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Line 3, column 717, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... If the leader disregards all the other students opinion and decides his is the best, ev...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the todays') or simply say ''most todays''.
Suggestion: most of the todays; most todays
... egotistic character is what is seen in most of todays leaders, regardless of what fields they...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... what fields they are in. These leaders dont have a sense of cooperation with the wo...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...r hurt anyone. It allows may increase a leaders motivation to work harder. They compete...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229601518027 0.240241500013 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.157495256167 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872865275142 0.0880659088768 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.034155597723 0.0497285424764 69% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0474383301708 0.0444667217837 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115749525617 0.12292977631 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0246679316888 0.0406280797675 61% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80459772892 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0322580645161 0.030933414821 104% => OK
Particles: 0.00379506641366 0.0016655270985 228% => OK
Determiners: 0.104364326376 0.0997080785238 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.022770398482 0.0249443105267 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0189753320683 0.0148568991511 128% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2882.0 2732.02544248 105% => OK
No of words: 475.0 452.878318584 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06736842105 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.378947368421 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.313684210526 0.280924506359 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210526315789 0.200843997647 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128421052632 0.132149295362 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80459772892 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 219.290929204 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517894736842 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 60.761202574 55.4138127331 110% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.3793103448 23.380412469 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.6339363351 59.4972553346 43% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3793103448 141.124799967 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3793103448 23.380412469 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.206896551724 0.674092028746 31% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 47.7477313975 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.54761904762 1.64882698954 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376183730305 0.391690518653 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0837554768433 0.123202303941 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0661941523605 0.077325440228 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.446860665232 0.547984918172 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.132494485939 0.149214159877 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124517591675 0.161403998019 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684914037874 0.0892212321368 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.306080337575 0.385218514788 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.150277514824 0.0692045440612 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249521332509 0.275328986314 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529761484309 0.0653680567796 81% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.