The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Today's young generation are the future of the country tomorrow. By teaching proper ethics to them, we can be assured that the country will be in safe hands. Leadership is essential in every part of our life. Without a proper captian the ship will surely get in trouble and ultimately fail. But the real challenge here is whether or not the leader is going to handle the situations with courage, confidence and by cooperating with his people rather than purely concentrating on his competetors. The argument that the young people should be instilled with a sense of coorperation rather than competition is for sure fair enough and agreeable.
Firstly, when a person gets into a job in either government, industry or any other field and had to lead a group of people, it is more likely that the people there will cooperate with him is if he treat them properly. If he is being bossy or not properly doing his job by only concentrating on unnecessary matters he is most likely to fail. When he is being really coorperative his fellow employees, they will be able to say whatever is on their mind freely. In real life, Mr. Ratan Tata is said to be really down to earth. It is said that, he himself will work with people in his company ocassionally. By treating the employees with respect it is sure that they will coorperate with the managers.
Second, a leader can only lead properly by being open to ideas from other employees which is possible only if he is being coorperative and not by being bossy. In this way, he is not only being successful as a leader but also responsible for keeping his firm in shape and contribute for the success of their company. After all, equality and giving respect to the rights of his fellow employees is what all matters for the prosperity of his firm as he will be respected and ultimately he will get his job done.
Finally, there are actually many cons if he is being more competitive with other people. The basic ethics will be forgotten and he will start thinking in an unethical manner and also not concentrate on his job. Also, he will be at great threat of loosing his job, if he concentrates more on others rather than his own job.
In conclusion, as the advantages by being coorperative rather than being competitive outweigh the disadvantages, the argument that the young people should be instilled with that sense is surely acceptable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ly fail. But the real challenge here is whether or not the leader is going to handle the situa...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'treats'.
Suggestion: treats
... there will cooperate with him is if he treat them properly. If he is being bossy or ...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: firm
...er but also responsible for keeping his firm in shape and contribute for the success of their...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unethical manner" with adverb for "unethical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...be forgotten and he will start thinking in an unethical manner and also not concentrate on his job. Al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, really, second, so, still, after all, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.5258426966 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68408551069 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68729129809 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465558194774 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7583487941 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.789473684 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0916300712067 0.243740707755 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361770840152 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408922075211 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0631006196168 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290701923433 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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