The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author concludes that in order to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies. This argument distorts the view of the situation by manipulating the facts and by providing weak evidences. However, careful scrutiny of the evidences in the letter reveals that it provides little credible support for the author's conclusion. Hence, the argument can be considered unsubstantiable or incomplete.
Firstly, the argument readily assumes that, by reducing the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season limits the number of accidents. This is merely an assumption without a solid ground. If the letter has provided answers to the questions like, what is the guarentee that even after reducing the number of mopeds rented in the island there is going to be a probability that the number of accidents taking place will reduce? The next hallowness of the letter is that, the writer is not sure that the accidents are happening by the moped driver's fault. The pedestrian might actually lack discipline and break the law by not walking on the footpaths which might be the sole reason for the accident happening in the first place. Is the writer sure that by reducing the mopeds renting in the summer alone will reduce the accidents taking place annually? Hence, the argument would have been more convincing if there are answers provided in the letter for these questions.
Second, the writer of the letter noted that when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals there was a 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents. This again a weak and unsupported argument. If the letter has provided evidences such as the actual number of mopeds being used in Seaville town, the total population of the town and importantly, is the restriction implemented in the summer season in the Seaville town? Consider a scenario that in the previous year there were 2 accidents involving moped and a pedestrian and this year there is just one accident. This is a 50 percent reduction in the number of accidents but this might happen even after reducing the mopeds by half as the number of accidents are significantly low.
Finally, the letter points out that the population is increased to 100,000 during the summer season. This actually can raise a skeptical question such as, what is the population of the country in no summer seasons? If the author has provided answers to this question the reader might find the lettr more convincing.
In conclusion, the letter is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the letter must have provided more concrete evidences and a detailed analysis. So, to better evaluate the letter more information about the actual population of the town and the population and number of accidents reduced in the neighbouring town should have been mentioned.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- This is correct:
The pedestrian might actually lack discipline and break the law by not walking on the footpaths ....
others are wrong.
argument 2 -- not OK. correct way: suppose it works in A, while it doesn't mean it will work at B.
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2463 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.946 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.861 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 440, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rovides little credible support for the authors conclusion. Hence, the argument can be ...
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Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...es from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season limits the number of accidents. This is...
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Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ntly, is the restriction implemented in the summer season in the Seaville town? Consider a scenar...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...pulation is increased to 100,000 during the summer season. This actually can raise a skeptical qu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on of the country in no summer seasons? If the author has provided answers to this...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, so, in conclusion, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2512.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 498.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04417670683 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67966000318 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419678714859 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1426017881 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.181818182 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276441743976 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815511175643 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820236563505 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160947499545 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036240185843 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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