The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, and other fields is by instilling in them a sense of co-operation, not competition.
The best way for the preparation of youth for society is to train them for co-operation, not competition is too strict to be supported. Here, the author argues that the feeling of competition will not be productive for a society. I am conditional about this statement. We cannot generalize all the sectors like leadership, industries, business, and other possible fields require co-operation rather than competition.
Firstly, as we all are well known about the development of various large industries and business firms and their competitors which finally leads to the development of a nation or society. The feeling of competition ts fundamental factor to be better than the opponent. If this feeling is not there in the youths of society, then, the expectation of development would be hurtful. To illustrate, i would like to present the example of network communication in Nepal. There was our national telecom service in Nepal - NEPAL TELECOM- which had very poor service until its competitor, Mero Nepal- a private telecom company- came into the market. The development of Nepal Telecom was credited to other competitors of it. If the other private companies would not have provided better service to Nepalese, they would be forced to use the pity service of Nepal Telecom till date. This shows that the feeling of competition leads to the development of a society.
Moreover, a competitive feeling would galvanize a youth to be the best performer of his sector. Let us consider a leader in a society who was never opposed by any members of society. He has no competitors around. This feeling of greatness might make him boastful. If a road is to be blacktopped in that society, the leader might not do his work efficiently as there is no one to compete with him. And assume there are opponents of him who are going to stand against them in next election. This forces him to make the public happy in his area so that he would win favor from the public. For this thing also he would do his work more efficiently.
Nonetheless, the feeling of co-operation is important enough to lead the society. The leader without co-operative feeling would never be the leader of society. He should learn to co-operate with the public to solve their problems and to be the part of it.
In sum, I would like to conclude that, the feeling of competition along with co-operation would be the best bonding for any individual to burgeon his capability in any sectors. And, these feeling should act correctly in the right place at the right time to be beneficial for a society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88558352403 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85633593067 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475972540046 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3294277725 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.48 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164811687287 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485171696598 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083685607115 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121376045882 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123374405088 0.0667264976115 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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