The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The question of balance between cooperation and competition has received increasing attention in recent decades. Young people, who are the future of society and should be prepared to become a future leader in the government, are under examine with greater scrutiny. Take the case at hand, would it be better to encourage the young to cultivate their sense of competition or cooperation? While it is undeniable that instilling them the idea to pursue competition can facilitate them to achieve higher goals and better accomplishment compare to their peers, I believe that being a successful cooperator is a more meaningful skill for the young people who would like to pursue the leadership in the government.
First, the government of a country needs to function as a holistic organism, which requires the close cooperation between its departments, officials and branches that responsible for each functional unit, such as economic, education and health. For instance, if a young individual would like to become the leader of the decision-making staff of the government's health care plan, he or she will highly likely to face the financial challenge, so to speak, tight collaboration with the economic department is necessary. In this case, it is the sense and ability of cooperation that a future leader of the government needs most instead of competition within the government.
Second, when the governments of countries are on the stage of world diplomacy, it is more important for them to cooperate with each other to improve the international connections to develop themselves rather than compete against each other. As the globalization becoming an inevitable trend on this planet, working independently and solitarily has turned to be a dead end for any country in the world. A future government needs to be capable of cannibalizing all the resource from other countries or international organizations such as WTO or IMF, by showing its dedication to cooperate openly and willingly. In this situation, the young generations who are turning to the next generation of the government should instill the sense of how to perform cooperation soundly as soon as possible, and as the top priority.
Finally, though it can be argued that a strong sense of competition can be beneficial for a young individual who is dedicated to a career in the government to achieve higher goals such as work ones way to an Ivy league university or obtain the degree with a distinction, which will essentially help them to gain a good-looking resume and potentially work as a stepstone to the future leadership. However, overly emphasizing the sense of competition could lead to advertent effects, such as ignoring other more important qualities that are necessary on the road to future government leadership, like a sense of cooperation.
In a nutshell, while it cannot be denied that learning the ability of competition could be salutary for young people, it is more important for them to be instilled the sense of cooperation when preparing them to be future leader of the government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...der of the decision-making staff of the governments health care plan, he or she will highly...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, still, while, for instance, such as, so to speak
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 38.0 12.9106741573 294% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2583.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 498.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18674698795 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14224179353 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467871485944 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 822.6 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.5035139066 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.5 118.986275619 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5714285714 23.4991977007 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273299108896 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095317566164 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575342345829 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16693709159 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041300838766 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 14.1392134831 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 48.8420337079 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.1743820225 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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