The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The claim states that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is to instill a sense of cooperation and not competition in them. Although cultivating a sense of cooperation can result in good relationships, I, nonetheless, believe that a person should inculcate both sense of cooperation and competition in order to achieve his/her goal for real. Thus, I disagree with the statement that young people need only sense of cooperation and not competition.

First, I would like to point out a few advantages of sense of competition in today's youngsters. Consider a leading technology company, for example, Google. Its almost on par rival company is Microsoft. If Microsoft is only looking to make friendly relationships with Google, it will probably get as far as a good exchange of employees between the two companies in the hope of releasing same quality products to the world. However, despite having the best engineers on floor, without them having the competitive mindset to beat the existing state-of-the-art technology, they are bound to remain mediocre. From this example, clearly, the best way for progress is not laid down by just a sense of cooperation but a strong sense of competition along with it as well.

Admittedly, a sense of competition has its upsides in the way it pushes faster growth, be it in economy, industry and what not. However, competition without cooperation among peers will prove futile. To illustrate, consider a nation's president actively and passionately working towards a better economy for the country. In his/her attempts, if he/she propagates that surpassing all the other nations' economy is the ultimate goal, the other nations might take it as a threat to their economies and this might further damage the relationships of this country with the others. In times of need for financial or military aid, other nations might not be ready to help because of the previous hostile propaganda by the president. In order to maintain more amiable relationships with other nations, tomorrow's leaders should learn a sense of cooperation as well as competition.

In conclusion, we never know the future needs of our business or nation or any other field for that matter. Friendly relationships with other countries might come to our rescue at the time of calamities. At the same time, depending on other countries/businesses for every small need will keep the nation/business dormant without much real progress. For real development, the nation's leaders must aggressively work towards transcending other nations' economy and same goes for the field of industries. Hence, today's youngsters need a sense of cooperation and competition to become tomorrow's leaders.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ropagates that surpassing all the other nations economy is the ultimate goal, the other...
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Line 5, column 725, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...us hostile propaganda by the president. In order to maintain more amiable relation...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... cooperation as well as competition. In conclusion, we never know the future ne...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ssively work towards transcending other nations economy and same goes for the field of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, nonetheless, so, still, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24027459954 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10460289536 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9398479408 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327683733501 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103686841469 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124961534881 0.0758088955206 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210955007887 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105190872645 0.0667264976115 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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