Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether Governments of nations should allocate more funds in major cities. The reason stated assumes that it is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated. Indisputably, cities do offer a variety of opportunities. They provide employment opportunities, better lifestyle compared to villages or towns with technological advancements helping us every step of the way. While it sounds sagacious to maintain as well as better what a city has to offer to its people, it definitely affects villages and smaller cities or towns adversely.
By providing more financial support to major cities, a nation should not neglect the state of villages and small towns. Almost every single nation on the globe, unfortunately, has a significant number of small towns and considerable number of slums. People from these places deserve equal right to food, water, education and progress as the major cities. If majority of Government’s funds go into developing already developed cities, what happens to the undeveloped or underdeveloped cities? Should they never experience progress? Should they remain backward in their economy? The Government should put the funds into good use and distribute them fairly such that there is hope for zero difference among economies of all the places in a country. No country should be in a dire state where the rich get richer and the poor get poorer.
Furthermore, the reason ostensibly supporting the given claim goes against popular belief of villages preserving culture more than cities. It is in the small villages that we find people still sticking to the old ancestral practices. When we think of a village, the first picture that comes to our mind is that of a green pastoral field with grazing cows scattered all over. This is a serene picture one always ascribes to the countryside. Most of the villages and small towns also have historical significance. In countries like India, the forts and palaces in the small towns built by their kings speak of rich the cultural heritage of the country. It is very rare that you can spot a historic monument in a large city, at least in India.
Besides that, cities being more developed, they attract a lot of emigrants. People from other cities or small towns of different cultures or traditions have moved to the major cities for higher paying jobs. This led to the pollution of the existing cultures and traditions adopted by native occupants of the cities. It is be hard to pair a city with a particular habit or custom as it is an amalgam of various customs. Government should invest more funds in order to preserve the heritage of the small towns and villages. That will lead to increased revenue for the country from tourism sector as well.
There are bigger problems than just tourism that a nation should solve. Education, infrastructure development, employment to name a few. Infrastructure like roads and sewage system are some of the priority elements. Many rural areas lack proper schools for kids. Using funds to set up schools not only helps in educating the kids but also opens up employment opportunities for aspiring teachers. Development in these sectors could lead to real prosperity. If we discriminate against or neglect the impecunious and keep flourishing only the developed ones, the country will keep going a downward spiral. Only when the government can focus its funds in betterment of all of its cities and villages equitably will the economy see a drastic improvement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to equal'
Suggestion: to equal
...slums. People from these places deserve equal right to food, water, education and pro...
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Line 7, column 323, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...y native occupants of the cities. It is be hard to pair a city with a particular h...
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Line 9, column 186, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ucture like roads and sewage system are some of the priority elements. Many rural areas lac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, well, while, as to, at least, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2990.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 584.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1198630137 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87507291838 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527397260274 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 936.0 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4159932924 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9411764706 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1764705882 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.79411764706 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253241189299 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585447058194 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076707062558 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144092438065 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082370863838 0.0667264976115 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 100.480337079 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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