The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition

Human’s as a species has been known to push it’s limits. To endure in the most dire conditions. It is not just modern humans this has been the case even when man lived in caves and competed for resources with other humans/tribes . We were never been told to do so. It is more or less a natural instinct. It is basically survival of the fittest.
There have been various instances in our modern history where competition has actually help modernizing our society. For instance the competition between the soviet union and USA lead to huge leaps in space exploration and once the space race ended between these two super powers space exploration sort of became stagnant.
Another great example where competition has lead to development is the completion between two silicon valley gaints apple and Microsoft. Which led to huge development in the computing industry.
Science and technology is not the only place. They are certain fields like sports where competion is the core aspect of the field. We could not have witnessed football legends like cristaino Ronaldo and lionel messi if there wasn’t any competition.
But also we cannot deny the fact that man is a social animal and that coopertation between us is important . For instance in times of epidemic breakout’s war etc all countries need to cooperate and look out for each other as one big family.
So to conclude. I strongly believe that competition has ensured our success as a species. But we as humans should not take competition to extremes which could lead to an unhealthy atmosphere. Competition should exist but just in the right proportion along side cooperation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...d for resources with other humans/tribes . We were never been told to do so. It i...
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Line 2, column 94, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to modernize' or 'modernize'.
Suggestion: to modernize; modernize
...ory where competition has actually help modernizing our society. For instance the competiti...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...icon valley gaints apple and Microsoft. Which led to huge development in the computin...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hat coopertation between us is important . For instance in times of epidemic break...
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Line 6, column 251, Rule ID: ALONG_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'alongside'?
Suggestion: alongside
... exist but just in the right proportion along side cooperation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, so, for instance, sort of, more or less

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 274.0 442.535393258 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06204379562 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83587120854 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624087591241 0.4932671777 127% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.0835880741 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4210526316 23.4991977007 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68421052632 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127484125981 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0287501777982 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412331722321 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0599711067668 0.150359130593 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331346848578 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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