The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Society requires both cooperative and competitive leaders. Each has their place in inspiring and pushing achievements in various fields. In fact, each often depends on the other, with a few exceptions. Examining cases in the miliary, government, technology and the arts illuminates this necessity.
Training for the US armed forces provides eluidation on the criticality of teamwork. College students in reserve officer training (ROTC) will graduate and immediately be placed in a leadership position managing enlisted servicemen. Yet during the four years of training, the first two emphasize teamwork alone: working in collaboration with one's peers to learn marching skills, uniform maintenance and presentation capacity. At the midpoint of school, trainers then orient students to prepare for leadership roles. To be selected for such roles, trainees must distinguish themselvess through competitive physical fitness tests and academic performance. However, upon graduation, while managing enlisted troops which might have 20+ years of field experience, these new officers will find themselves at the bottom of military heirarchy, which will again require them to cooperate well with peers.
In some cases, competition is the motivator for achievement, and sometimes it is the goal in and of itself. Thus this makes collaboration in between. During election campaigning, staffers develop and maintain close relationships while supporting eachother during the long, strenuous hours. These staffers share goals in governence and are inspired by a shared vision. But at the end, the goal of the campaign is to beat the competition.
Another example of such a symbiotic relationship can be found in the private sector. Bill Gates had the dream to innovate new solutions for economical water purification in developing countries. While it was largly altruistic motives and love for mankind that inspired this dream, Bill was not able to enlist the involvement of top universities until he declared it a competition amongst them. He had written to eight universities, and none responded until they were moved to win amongst fellow academics.
While competition and collaboration are certainly key in many roles in society, young people should also be instilled with the value of independence. There are some persuits of excellence, such as in music or the arts in which introverts commit many solitary hours to a work that will be presented and credited to them alone. In such cases, young peopl
Collaboration and competition are the ying and yang of prudent leadership. Thus, it is sagacious that young people should be instructed and excited about each aspect to reach excellence. In the military, government, technology and other arenas, team work is often essential in the incipient phases of a career and participation in society. Yet there is a middle ground when some achievements can be reach by neither.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...rk alone: working in collaboration with ones peers to learn marching skills, uniform...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to march'.
Suggestion: to march
... collaboration with ones peers to learn marching skills, uniform maintenance and present...
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Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...times it is the goal in and of itself. Thus this makes collaboration in between. D...
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Line 9, column 442, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he campaign is to beat the competition. Another example of such a symbiotic rela...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... moved to win amongst fellow academics. While competition and collaboration are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, thus, well, while, in fact, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2483.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50554323725 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04404954446 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59645232816 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1131000872 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.32 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.04 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158249468826 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038013212385 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326875686985 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717573473389 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320453783498 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 100.480337079 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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