The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Youth is the power factor of any country. The future of the country totally depends upon it's youth generation. As humans have a natural tendancy of learning from what they see around them in their society. We peoples adapt ourself according to our society, so a society plays a vital role in developing us. I strongly agree with the author's prompt that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government or in any other field is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition. Competing leads to a qualified self success but cooperating leads to the overall developement of an individual as well as others surrounding them.
Competition developes a feeling of envy among the peoples that can lead them to ineluctable damage in their life. Competition only enhances the growth of a single individual while cooperation leads to the overall developement of the society. Competing isn't a bad thing but when the competition becomes personal among the individuals it can cause a severe damage. One can achieve great things with cooperation that can't be solely achieved by the competition. For instance, we can see that all the behemoth IT industry are each others competitor but at the same time they cooperate with each other as well. Because there are some problems that could only be solved by cooperation, no matter how strong the industry is but if they fail to cooperate with others in the corporate world their success would be stated as qualified success.Therefore such qualities should be taught to the yong peoples by the society.
For an instance, let's say in a school there were two students, one was the brightest one and the other one was not so bright in academics but was good in other activities. The bright student alwyas used be first in the class, he always tried to compete with others and be on the top and hence does not have good relations with other students as he alwyas wanted to be on the top most position in the class and hence was not so helpful and cooperative with other students. While the second student who was a moderate one was not so good in academics but had a very good relation with others, as he always used to help others. When there was election in the school both of the students were standing in the election, the brightest one and the moderate one. When the results were out the moderate students won the election just because of his ability of coperarting with other. While the other student was only busy in competing and he did not realise that becasue of this competative nature he did not have good relations with others and therefore lost the elections.
By coperating, one can achieve anything what it seems impossible to achieve alone, because there will always be someone for your help. Therefore i think that society must instill the sense of comoperation and not competitoin in their young peoples.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, i think, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 504.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80158730159 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68057831931 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468253968254 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4315673051 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227216734844 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736758568918 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133681818578 0.0758088955206 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164867476858 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122721608007 0.0667264976115 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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