The best way for society to prepare it's young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Right now the world is striving towards globalization which includes cooperation among all the nation in the world. Here, the prompt suggests that by teaching young people a sense of cooperation rather than competition is the best way to prepare them for leadership in various areas like government, industry, etc. I mostly agree with the statement and think that instilling a sense of cooperation is one of the best way to prepare young people for career in leadership.
To begin with, cooperation is needed in today's modern world where most of the countries are interconnected with each other by various means like economy, trade, border, aid, etc. Effective leader in this day and age should be familiar with this interconnection and should work to bolster this connection. To bolster this connection the leader should be cooperative in nature as the culture, tradition, policy, etc of another country is completely different.
Secondly, with the sense of cooperation among the people in any work place the productivity will increase. The sense of cooperation can only be established in the workplace if the boss or the leader believes in cooperation. For instance, in a case of engineering firm, let us suppose we have two talented structural engineers. If the boss with the firm believer of cooperation will delegate the work to both engineers to be done together. In doing so, both engineers can share ideas and the design is bound to be better than the design if they have worked independently. So a leader with a better sense of cooperation can inspire the employees for cooperation and increase the productivity.
However, in some of the fields like sales, the sense of competition can harness a better result among the employees. For instance, in some work place, if there is bonus for a highest number of sales then employees with compete against each other for that bonus. In this way the worker will gain more experience about the sales and company will have more profit. So, in this kind of field a leader who can inspire a sense of competition among the employees will be effective.
In conclusion, teaching cooperation among the young people is one of the best way to prepare them for leadership position as sense of cooperation is needed in modern globalized word and sense of cooperation can bolster the productivity of the work place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eration is needed in todays modern world where most of the countries are intercon...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...have two talented structural engineers. If the boss with the firm believer of coop...
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Suggestion: some
...ease the productivity. However, in some of the fields like sales, the sense of competi...
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Suggestion: the
... some work place, if there is bonus for a highest number of sales then employees ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02538071066 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90173348246 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451776649746 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5351886535 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.470588235 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1764705882 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206762183711 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767379694284 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905710449704 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143065714651 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111487575396 0.0667264976115 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.