The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compellingreasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position
When the generation of today matures, it is important for them to succeed and become the successful leaders in government, industry and other fields. There are many traits that leaders must possess, and cooperation is one of these very important characters. Nonetheless it isimportant for leaders to have a sense of competition, so as to prevent themselves from being complacent with their position.
Cooperation is needed in order to be a functional person in society, while still adhering to social standards. Most leaders in society did not start out as such. A person cannot isolate themselves from others with demeanor and attitude and expect to become an executive. While there may be leaders that have developed this ill attitude towards others, they did not get there by being that way. A person who is able to effectively cooperate with others, will subsequently develop a nexus of supporters. Through collaboration, people are able to develop their studies further and better themselves.
However, it is still important for there to be a sense of competition. Competition is the root of motivation for most. It drives us to become stronger, smarter, and to want more. Nonetheless, the spirit of competition must also be reigned in, and not be allowed to run wild. Competitiveness can lead to abuse of power and distasteful actions, which is quite the opposite of someone who displays cooperativeness.
Some may argue that competition is not needed. That those that are meant to be leaders will not become complacent, because they have their own internal drive to lead. If there was no competition, there would be no world records. Michael Phelps may not be a leader of government or industry, but he is certainly educated on the technique of swimming, and leader in his field. Would he be as good as he is today if there was np competition? Would the leaders of Microsoft have been motivated to create Bing if there was no Google?Cooperation helped many leaders get where they are today and will continue to do so in the future. But leaders, as well as those that aspire to be one, all need to have a sense of competitionas well
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Nonetheless,
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...displays cooperativeness. Some may argue that competition is not needed. That th...
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Suggestion: Cooperation
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...f there was no Google?Cooperation helped many leaders get where they are toda...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, well, while, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95027624309 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00019331306 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519337016575 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3567216435 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3333333333 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2380952381 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95238095238 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0966784265476 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334994519357 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433023631987 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701355206543 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399368966312 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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