"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

Leaders are the main person in any field be it whether in government, industry, or other fields who leads their related institutions towards development for the welfare of society and nations. Leadership should be cooperative but at same time they should be competitive on certain situation. So, I agree with author of this statement to some extend that society should be instilling cooperative sense in young people for leadership but they should also have competitive feel in positive way.
Firstly, young people are like raw brick they will learn and catch what they are taught in this stage. Therefore, if society praise cooperative behavior in young people then they would be cooperative in any field they step into. They would be have friendly and innocuous nature to his both coworker and opponent. For instance, if child since his childhood is praise to be cooperative then he would be friendly and co-operative with his teachers, parents and his classmate/ friends. Later on when he is select to be leader in any field then we will have placid and convivial relation with his coworker and partner which proves him to be good leader and public/organization wants him as leader.
Secondly, if person is cooperative since his young age he would not be involving in the activities such as brawling, corruption and activities which are immoral to the society and nations. However, he try to stay away from such activities and even try to solve such issue if it is in hand. For example, if a boy have only competitive feelings in whatever he do. He just want to win in whatever he step into he did not care about the path he carry to be winner or to be at top then such person is so self-center and did not think about welfare of society. This will harm every people who are depend on such institution directly or indirectly.
Although cooperative sense is beneficial, to be leader cooperative sense single cannot be enough. He also need to have competitive feeling to some extent. We face many situations in our life in which point we have to have competitive sense otherwise we would be backward and lack our confident in anything we pursue. If leader have cooperative and competitive feelings in positive way then he would be jealous of this good competitor and try to be better than them while ensuring welfare of his institutions and people related to them. So, its better to have certain degree of competitive sense than not be have them at all.
All in all, society should praise its young people to be cooperative but they should also let them have competitive sense in what they to certain degree with development and welfare for nations and society in their mind.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...e with author of this statement to some extend that society should be instilling coope...
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Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...rative since his young age he would not be involving in the activities such as brawling, cor...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
...to the society and nations. However, he try to stay away from such activities and e...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...nly competitive feelings in whatever he do. He just want to win in whatever he ste...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'steps'.
Suggestion: steps
... do. He just want to win in whatever he step into he did not care about the path he ...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'carries'.
Suggestion: carries
... into he did not care about the path he carry to be winner or to be at top then such ...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...of society. This will harm every people who are depend on such institution directly or ...
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Line 3, column 591, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...ty. This will harm every people who are depend on such institution directly or indirec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 462.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80735930736 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7428717983 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426406926407 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9488303899 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.894736842 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3157894737 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139614110595 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556202508304 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489389648169 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101818360692 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495985941938 0.0667264976115 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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