Behaviors of people determine what is the nature, society in which he/she belongs, education level and financial status of particular person to some extent. I agree with the claim that people behavior is largely determined by external forces. And such forces are society in which they grow up, national environment and education level.
Firstly, I think the main external forces that determine people's behavior is society in which they belong and family. A person's learn to perceive any kind of situation as how his society and family have discern it. They handle the situations as their family member have been taking care of it or how his moral has thought him. For instance, in a certain male dominant society a child grow up seeing trivial role of women beside household activities which consequently make bad impression on child about equality. Later on he/she pass same moral as they received and imagination of commensurate society would only remain on imagination.
Secondly, if a child belong to poor financial status family then he would realize money can buy happiness. Child would either work hard, and toiling in his study to improve his/her financial status or he/she can involve in illegal activities to earn easy money to overcome their financial status. They would understand the importance of money in life, learn to utilize them wisely. With their life lesson they would learn to help needy people, not to dominate indigent for their situations.
Although person's behavior is mostly determine by external forces, later when he/she is educated then some cases can be different. Some can make a difference on right and wrong about any topic. They can put forward their opinion unlike following families/society orthodox opinions. They can establish new moral and norms suitable in current context, helping to develop society to develop nation.
All in all, every person's behavior is affected by the external forces than their own making. It is just the matter of degrees of affection of such forces on a person. Some people behavior is highly determined by such forces and some are merely affected by such forces.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: A_PLURAL
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: A person; Persons
...ociety in which they belong and family. A persons learn to perceive any kind of situation...
Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT
Message: Use past participle here: 'discerned'.
...tion as how his society and family have discern it. They handle the situations as their...
Line 4, column 37, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'determined'.
...s. Although persons behavior is mostly determine by external forces, later when he/she i...
Line 4, column 139, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'makes'.
...n some cases can be different. Some can make a difference on right and wrong about a...
Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... to develop nation. All in all, every persons behavior is affected by the external fo...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12320916905 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56261398162 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538681948424 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2272457705 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.1052631579 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3684210526 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162771455282 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598856164672 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593370178539 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103207688928 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604300150282 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.