The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The contention that a society should instill a sense of cooperation rather than competition in young people in not a trivial one. It is not uncommon for a society to teach its youth how to cooperate with others. The prompt suggests that a society should teach its young people how to cooperate instead of how to compete in order to prepare them for leadership roles in many fields. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this suggestion for two reasons.

To begin with, competition is an integral part of our lives. We are taught how to compete with others from a very young age and the sense of competition is carried out with us throughout our lives. For instance, a student in a school studies hard and does his best to receive excellent grades in order to be the top of his class. This student competes with all his classmates in order for him to be the top of his class. Such example shows how competition is instilled in us from school until the rest of our lives.

Further, competition prepares people for leadership roles more than cooperation does. Although, as a leader on must cooperate with others it is more important for a leader to know how to compete with others. Therefore, a society should instill a sense of competition rather than cooperation in young individuals. For instance, a student who wants to go to Harvard in order to become the future's top scientist, they begin their competition process from high school. In this society, a top university such as Harvard requires high GPA and high SAT scores. Thus, a student who knows how to compete better than other students have a higher chance getting into Harvard than others. Therefore, competition is the only way in this society for individuals to become great leaders.

In conclusion, a society should instill a sense of competition rather than cooperation in its young people. How else would an individual get elected to be a president of the United States? By competing against other candidates of course. Thus, the person who is better at competition than the other is the one to win the election. Therefore, competition is very important in leadership roles.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, of course, such as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1785.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82432432432 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74815962059 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435135135135 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3956525117 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.0 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.619047619 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26694614563 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919612668806 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07432721892 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183550977612 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787095143007 0.0628817314937 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.32208582834 84% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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