The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Cooperation and competition are the ways of providing impetus to the successful completion of any activity effectively, either on leadership activitity or on the other multifaced sectors. But, on comparing those two, I would like to go with the sense of cooperation as the more important than the other.

To embark on, lets have an example of Martin Luther king. He had a support of all the black brothers and sisters which made him achieve his dream of emancipating 'The Blacks' from several years of detention as a slave. It might seem plausible that, he might have obtained that height and success due to the sense of competition in him for all the political power and other governing activities, but the sole feeling of competition could not lead him to accomplishment of his goal, if he were not corroborated by the large crowd of people beside him.

Further, we can have the example of Maoist and communist's success in Nepal. Recently, it has been known that the political resurgence of communism and Maoist in Nepal was only possible due to the backing of Indian government and other sectors. In this case too, there may be some skepticism regarding either they gain success solely through competition? or, they were driven by the feeling of competition for power? Both, seems somehow plausible; but, meticulous analysis of all the events and chain of activities shows that the role of cooperation outweighs the role of competitive nature for the achievement of the success. Even, they were further able to outcast several years of monarchy by the cooperation of even the opposing parties.

We can even have the example from our day to day activities and carefully notice that we are being able to get what we wanted, especially in gaining certain height by the sense of cooperation. For my case, its always the cooperative nature of mine and my friends which help both of us in turning the chaotic situation into an advantage.

Thus, on juxtapositing both the cooperation and competition and marking their benefits, cooperation outweighs in terms of benefit, and lead us to believe that the cooperation is the way that every society should instill in its young people so as to make a better future for the youths, which gradually turns the worse government to a better one, that secures the future of the further generation, and make the country a better place.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, regarding, so, still, thus, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91791044776 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80026147354 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537313432836 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.512157859 60.3974514979 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.214285714 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7142857143 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35714285714 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157233490821 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465367774662 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422238473067 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876289937178 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287289722592 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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