the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
A leader is the one who considers people as their's and people follow him/her due to his cooperating skills. To be a leader in any field, one needs to be taking people in their favor by gaining the confidence and support of the people. The prompt recommends that to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields, society must be encouraging the younger individuals the sense of cooperation, not competition. I strongly agree with the prompt suggested basis of two reasons.
To begin with, a younger age is the time period of an individual when the habits or skills acquired at that time, become peculiar to an individual. It's the age when things can be molded and can be taught how you want it to be. Leadership is the quality of an individual which can be developed by teaching the individuals the importance of cooperation. Everyone looks for the leader who listens to them and takes care of them. He/she might not be the great warrior or great intellectual, but people want to see their leader as he/she is someone who will be there when they would need any help or any sort of favor. For instance, if a leader is not cooperative, people would be hesitant to trust him when they would be in need of anything and that would ultimately lose confidence in his leadership qualities. A true leader is one who knows how to keep up to the expectations of their people and be always available to cooperate when required. Society should be encouraging this thought in young individuals from childhood only so that they acquire the true leadership skills.
Furthermore, it's the competition that kills even the other qualities of a leader. Competition brings the superiorness among the individuals and individual can't be a leader if he/she has a sense of competition. A leader can't be the one who tries to compete with their people, instead, he/she should be having the cooperating nature. For example, if anyone wants to be the public representative of any govt., he must have to gain the trust of the people and that can come only if he has that friendliness nature and helping nature. Govt. should be including the programs focusing on leadership skills in the school curriculum to nurture leadership skills in young individuals.
However, one can argue that competitive sense in young individuals brings them to do their best than others. But he/she ultimately loses the trust of the people when there is any competitive thinking arises. Basis of these reasons, society can help prepare its young individuals for leadership in any field by instilling a sense of cooperation, and not competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...time, become peculiar to an individual. Its the age when things can be molded and c...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ue leadership skills. Furthermore, its the competition that kills even the oth...
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Line 9, column 156, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ss among the individuals and individual cant be a leader if he/she has a sense of co...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...he has a sense of competition. A leader cant be the one who tries to compete with th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, still, for example, for instance, sort of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89285714286 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86226869999 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8137231823 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.6 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256162383096 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097987271403 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126483616061 0.0758088955206 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216439954706 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107096338552 0.0667264976115 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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