"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
Today's youth are society's indisposable treasures. They bring in new ideas and technology in the area that they are present in, be it the government, industry or any different fields. Their approach in many things though unorthodox in many cases can prove fruitful as they well understand the minds of their generation. Thus, it is important how they are brought up and if they are moved to positions of greater authority, then how they are set up. There are mainly two approaches to this either have them work together or make them compete against each other.
Collaboration is an essential component of any society, be it as big as the government or as small as a small scale industry. Each fundamental part though serving a very small role is essential to the organization when combined with other such smaller factors. The youngsters setup in the higher authority positions with the feeling of collaboration might help in taking the authorization to new heights. They will constantly try to find areas where they can contribute and try to help wherever needed.
Rivalry is basically getting to each other's throats and competing wherever possible. Rivalry with other competitors outside an organization is good, but within it can corrupt and can crumble anything easily. Internal rivalry over who gets praise or the seat of authority can cause jealousy and ill intent towards one another. Though not visible directly it might be the cause of constant turmoil within an organization. In a way this might help the competitors, if any talented people leave due to the internal chaos they might get appropriated by the competitors and might prove dangerous to the well being of the organization.
A sense of strong collaboration coupled with no rivalry might make the youngster set on this path an ideal person to be followed. He will have some tools that others won't, on the lines of listening patiently, picking up the best out of any conversations, not trying to belittle others and most importantly the sense of commitment towards the organization.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
...ed with other such smaller factors. The youngsters setup in the higher authority positions...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, thus, well, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04105571848 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88183117788 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551319648094 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0319997075 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.4375 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0842482738683 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284327098085 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292135127179 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0530513556394 0.150359130593 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227850044655 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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