Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The future of any society lies on the shoulders of its young people and can sway to any side good or bad according to how we shape their minds. There are two ways we can go about this task, either we can instill in them a sense of cooperation or else a path of competition. I partially agree with this claim for below three reasons.
Firstly, if we put the young people to compete against one another then we are just pushing them into a rat race. A famous example to highlight this is the crab theory, in which when you put some crabs in a bucket, all these crabs try to get to the top of the bucket to escape. Due to the height of the bucket they try to get on top of each other to gain altitude, but some of the other crabs trying to get out themselves pull these crabs down with them. Similarly, when you put up high placed people to tackle with others they might surely try to get to the top and others surely will try to get them down in turn toppling the organization which they are trying to uphold. The case can be reversed and these main people might not let anyone get past them and try to become an obstacle for themselves succeeding.
Further, by making the youth compete with one another we are imbibing in them the weight of being at the top. For example in many households parents try to force upon their children the pressure of competing against hundreds of other students and be a topper amongst them. This makes the kids feel unnecessary stress in the end making them low performers. Same is the case with young people who have been posititoned at leadership seats in governments, industries or other fields. Rather than letting others help them achieve they might totally shun outside help thinking of it as an attempt to topple them and end up hurting themselves.
However, no competition at all and an institution might be facing a stagnation or even a downfall. For example, an IT company in the market might be facing many competitors in the same product line. But due to no sense of competition may be relaxed, engrossed in their own world working at their own pace. This will certainly make their products outdated and make them incur heavy losses at the cost of trying to cooperate with a ruthless market. Thus, a total absence of competition might lead to extreme laziness which might be detrimental to the companies well being.
Hence, to conclude we can safely say that a sense of cooperation among the youth at leadership positions is of utmost importance for the growth of a company as a whole. But, totally ignoring competition might also be hazardous for the organization eventually collapsing it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, then, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53991596639 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5057688895 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497899159664 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0298140434 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.05 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209851337593 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678547027636 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408327049695 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109273805143 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448293063955 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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