In the Carlton County the incidences of vandalism has been increasing over the past two years and at the same time there has also been dramatic increase in out of state migrants So we should ban all the immigrants moving in the city in order to stop vanda | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In the Carlton County the incidences of vandalism has been increasing over the past two years and at the same time there has also been dramatic increase in out-of-state migrants. So we should ban all the immigrants moving in the city in order to stop vandalism.

The argument by a citizen to the editor states that there has been a steady rise in incedents related to vandalism in Carlton County. The citizen has also noted the steady increase of out-of-state migrants moving to the county over the past few years. The citizen links these two together and advices the government to reduce the number of such migrants coming to the city to prevent further incedents of vandalism in the county. Though the argument made by this person might seem correct at first glance, it cannot hold true due to it being rife with loopholes that have not been properly explained.

The large time period of two years mentioned for the rise of vandallism makes the argument less compelling. The exact time at which such things happen like daytime, evening or night might help to think of preventive measures to employ against the hooligans. The actual number of cases also has not been mentioned, which might be very crucial in verifying the actual magnitude in which the destruction of the public property can be understood.

The actual status of these migrants has not been given like are they from rich or poor background, their educational qualification also their overall behaviour. These factors prove to be very important to determine wheter a particular person might commit such crime. Also the fact that the survey which might have been conducted to find out the number of settled migrants can have neglected the fact that the people who have settled here might be citizens of the same county which might have stayed away and have recently come back. The census has not been clearly stated and could well be a big wild guess.

It has been given that many citizens believe that the rise in migrants sttling in the county has led to the increase in the vandalism. The exact number of citizens which believe so has not been given. Also how the citizen reporting to this got to the conclusion like through some survey he or she might have conducted is also not given. Also the vandalisms might have been conducted by the very citizens of the county who wanted to undermine these out-of-state people.

Thus, the reduction of the migrants might not necessarily guarantee the prevention of further cases of vandalism and damage to public property. If the government would reduce the number of migrants this could seriously topple the economy as the jobs would be left vacant. Thus the citizen needs to provide more details, untill which the goverment cannot take serious action against the migrants. So the citizen needs to provide specific statistics in the form of actual numbers to make their opinion heard.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to the county over the past few years. The citizen links these two together and ad...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...asures to employ against the hooligans. The actual number of cases also has not bee...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e public property can be understood. The actual status of these migrants has not...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ticular person might commit such crime. Also the fact that the survey which might ha...
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Line 7, column 202, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ns which believe so has not been given. Also how the citizen reporting to this got t...
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Line 7, column 338, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...might have conducted is also not given. Also the vandalisms might have been conducte...
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Line 9, column 273, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...onomy as the jobs would be left vacant. Thus the citizen needs to provide more detai...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90178571429 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41921451137 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464285714286 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6467159612 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.578947368 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.63157894737 5.70786347227 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239847909163 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857141932168 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071719874719 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142831930262 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750660729755 0.0628817314937 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments