The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The assertion that the best way for a society to prepare its people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition is a controversial issue. I think there are some issues that we should consider but in general, I agree with the statement because of reasons which are elucidated below.

First of all, we live in a society and in order to make a good impact on our country we need cooperation with other people. So a sense of cooperation is an important factor in achieving our goals. Moreover, in the absence of this sense people cannot trust each other and leaders can not handle works efficiently. For example, assume a company in which all the employees lack a sense of cooperation. In this situation managers can not delegate different tasks to their employees and as a consequence company will not achieve its goals.

Moreover, there are some dark sides to improving the sense of competition among young people. It is possible that they do immoral actions to win the competition. For example, assume there is two company in a country which produce the same products. These companies are competing to attract more customer and there is a strong sense of competition among them. It is possible that they use some wrong ways in order to win the competition. So, it is better to improve a sense of cooperation instead of competition.

On the other hand, improving a sense of competition can have a positive impact on leadership. It can motivate managers to work harder in order to win the competition with other companies. In the absence of competition, there is less chance to have effective leaders and they become demotivated even in the cooperative atmosphere.

To sum it all, there are numerous benefits to instilling a sense of cooperation in future leaders, but we should consider that they need a sense of competition too. Otherwise, they will not successful leaders in the future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, still, for example, i think, in general, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 329.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87841945289 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90187450429 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455927051672 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 524.7 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1029072611 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.1666666667 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283580387465 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889878394433 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986762333145 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171590602367 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106103765372 0.0667264976115 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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